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Brood`s Supper.

by choille 

Posted: 19 February 2011
Word Count: 529
Summary: For the barbed wire fence & bones do - just slung this together - will polish.
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I hate waste so I’d hang the entrails along the fence - viscera etcetera. It served two purposes: clean disposal and the luring in of carrion, the predators.
Economical.

The bones would be set amongst the glowing charcoals in the grate after the dog had gnawed out the marrow. In the morning the grey husks of limb and carcass could be ground to powdery ash and dusted amongst the brassicas, poured like flour out of a brown poke onto the dull, wet sod I call my garden.

Deft martens and other sly quadrupeds would unhook the bits of fat and lung, unfasten blued-eyed cockerels heads that would never crow this side of Christendom again. And this would be done a'tween darkening and dusk, behind my fat back and in front of John who came up with the tide and never once saw the furry beasts feasting on the poultry bits stuck to the spines of the barbed wire fence on my quarter.

Even on nights such as these: Northern lights dancing green - azure shimmering in a midnight February sky. Stars - holes poked in a black cloak and the horizon curved - visible. Trees straggling against the hill in scratchy silouhette. Things that move; fly, creep are seen by others out and about on this reckless run. But I see none other than John walking the lower lea with his heavy priest carved from a stag’s antler, hollowed out and filled with lead, so that its thwack puts dead instantaneously the receiver of its brutal kiss. In the morning he will lay the silver meat on the best platter and place it in the pantry on the cold shelf after he’s gralloched it and pegged its inners on the spines of fence to feed the buzzards and crows, the owl - which will boak up the bones into neat parcels. Parcels that come wrapped in fur, feathers, hairs and sometimes down - which makes me sad to see; sad to see the duckling’s coat amongst the debris on the field’s floor.

The kits are keening on this still night. I hear their whelps, their sightless squeaks from down in the cosy of the dry stane dyke. They’ll be curled about leaves, moss and bracken fronds ginger. Dark brown amongst the rust. New hearts beating in their dark lair as they wait for blood warm food and their Mother’s milk.

The grass is iced white as are the trees, as pretty as etched glass. I want to study it at leisure, explore the depth of acid reach, touch the satin bloom of frosted story but I hear the wires creak, hear entrails being tugged from their housing. I turn and watch the bold Mother, teats swollen against sharp metal spikes, pink paws pulling twists of meat and cartilage onto the shadowed floor.

John is stood next to me now, his priest poised - the weight balanced in his palm, the white moon picking out the indentations of the antler decider. I lay my hand on his arm, still the killing wield that seemed already hesitant, reluctant, and we watch silently the mother gathering up her brood’s black clotted supper.






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tusker at 07:41 on 20 February 2011  Report this post
Wonderful visuals here, Caroline.

Such a stark but beautiful story. It's has a poetical feel to it. Nature and country living so well described.

Jennifer

<Added>

I notice you'd 'slung this together.' Well slung.

Cornelia at 08:30 on 20 February 2011  Report this post
Very effective nature description. I wasn't quite sure what was feeding on the entrails.

Sheila

OklyDokly at 10:34 on 20 February 2011  Report this post
A very nice story.

I'm much in awe of your style, you have a mesmerizing voice and I will certainly look out for more of your work.

Chris

V`yonne at 11:09 on 20 February 2011  Report this post
Caroline that is wonderful and I hope you are sending it out. You always stun me! Your studies on nature are so deft and deep that with every sentence there is more revealed of your plot. So good thai one and congrats on winning - I would have chosen this too.

Bunbry at 11:45 on 20 February 2011  Report this post
You've captured nature red in tooth and claw very effectively here Caroline. Very atmospheric and a worthy winner.

I see you intend having a tweak, so I'll point out a couple of words that jarred for me.

'Quadrupeds', 'Christendom' 'Instantaneously' and 'Undulations' The only other thing was you used quite a few hyphens in para 4.

I hope at least some of this helps!

Nick

choille at 13:07 on 20 February 2011  Report this post
Hi All - what a surprise, many thanks for reading & commenting.

Glad you liked it.
It was a Pine marten that came & took the guts back to her kits Sheila. They have a fondness for fat & have mangled quite a few burd feeders also they have afondness for Rare Breed poultry & have done likewise with those.

Nick - I'll change undulations to indentations as it doesn't fit the way I have it - cheers for that.

All the best
Caroline.

tractor at 15:51 on 20 February 2011  Report this post
Hi Caroline,

this is a piece of writing that makes time stand still.
Beautiful.

Cheers

Mark

Cornelia at 17:42 on 20 February 2011  Report this post
Thanks for explaining, Caroline. I was expecting vultures - or maybe not vultures but birds of prey, so was confused by the teats, asking myself if some birds suckled their young, and wondering about the pink paws. Duh! I've been a town dweller too long.

Sheila


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