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Coeden

by tusker 

Posted: 09 February 2011
Word Count: 218
Summary: For Bill's 'opening' challenge


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It has always stood here with an opening at the side of its thick trunk; an opening that resembles lips which has spread wider through the decades.

As a child, that opening supported my foot when I clambered up and onto its branches. From the top, Coeden heard all my dreams and fears while I hid from the world and childhood traumas. During autumn, it revealed its true splendour. Through winter it stood bare and proud. When Spring approached, green buds appeared in furry clusters. Blue tits skittered through new foliage.

I courted my late wife beneath it’s leafy canopy. Our two sons built a tree house between two sturdy boughs. They posted coded messages into that same opening to join all my boyhood whispers and, through the years, Coeden has witnessed the steady progress of my children’s growing and my gradual decline into old age.

Town council planners claim the bypass will ease traffic congestion. I won’t be driving down their new road, I promise Coeden, even if it were laid with twenty carat gold instead of Tarmac. I hear its branches creak and stir which seems to echo my own sad sigh of resigned acceptance but, I know, a part of me will die when, next week, the axe falls upon Coeden, my tree of life.








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dharker at 08:26 on 09 February 2011  Report this post
Coeden has witnessed the steady progress of my children’s growing and my gradual decline into old age


I love your use of a name for the tree Jennifer and the sentiment behind this story of witness over vast volumes of time, of which we are a mere blip... How sad but true that such ancient witness is so regularly cut short for our concept of "progress" too

Dave

Manusha at 11:24 on 09 February 2011  Report this post
Hi Jennifer,

I enjoyed how your tale lay centered around the tree, they remain steady while our lives change so quickly. It reminds me of a program I saw about the changing history of the lands around a thousand year old oak.

Andy

tractor at 13:41 on 09 February 2011  Report this post
Hi Jennifer,

a sad tale well executed.

Cheers

Mark

Prospero at 14:42 on 09 February 2011  Report this post
Trees hold such love in their hearts, that is why I hug them.

Great story, Jennifer.

Best

John

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Does the name Coeden have any significance? It seems to precise to be accidental.

J.

tusker at 14:45 on 09 February 2011  Report this post
Thanks Dave,

Coeden is Welsh for tree, so I thought it would suit mine.

Jennifer

tusker at 14:46 on 09 February 2011  Report this post
Thanks Andy,

I'd hate to look out of my window and not see a tree.

Jennifer

tusker at 14:47 on 09 February 2011  Report this post
Thanks Mark.

We wield the axe to often.

Jennifer

tusker at 14:51 on 09 February 2011  Report this post
Thanks John,

Glad you hug trees too. My apple tree thrives and gives us plenty of fruit despite being old, gnarled and with many bends so it deserves some TLC.

Coeden is Welsh for tree.

Jennifer

Desormais at 17:17 on 09 February 2011  Report this post
That was a sad flash Jennifer. Well written with some great imagery of childhood. Well done.
Sandra

tusker at 17:39 on 09 February 2011  Report this post
Thanks Sandra.

Glad you enjoyed.

Jennifer

Bunbry at 20:07 on 09 February 2011  Report this post
You are on great form this week Jennifer, very emotive indeed. I'm no expert but is there such a thing a 20 carat gold?

Nick

Manusha at 22:12 on 09 February 2011  Report this post
I'd hate to look out of my window and not see a tree.

Oh God, wouldn't it be awful!

I lived in central London for some years and its only saving grace was that its founders, in their wisdom, had planted many parks with trees.

When I went out, after reading your story, I looked at the trees thinking how plain the landscape would be without them. Their height and granduer, their age and stability, gives a sense of permanance in the world around us. A small glimpse of eternity in the temporal world in which we live.

Apparently, in the causal realm, the trees grant all desires, just as in this world they give freely of their fruits to all that wish them.

Perhaps that's why we feel such a deep kinship with them when we open our hearts. ;

tusker at 06:53 on 10 February 2011  Report this post
Thanks Nick.

Yes, it should've been 22 carat. You realise, now, I'm not into gold. I prefer silver.

Jennifer



tusker at 06:54 on 10 February 2011  Report this post
I whole heartedly agree with your last statement, Andy.

Jennifer

V`yonne at 23:49 on 11 February 2011  Report this post
That's such a sad tale - I hate the loss of any tree.

tusker at 06:42 on 12 February 2011  Report this post
Thanks Oonah.

Jennifer

crowspark at 11:36 on 13 February 2011  Report this post
Loved this. My childhood was filled with "special" trees. "The Crocodile" was a fallen hollow trunk that we all played on (and in). Some trees for climbing and some for talking to (when the bullies weren't around).
This encapsulates so much of life and regret for what must pass in just 218 words.
Well done.

Bill

tusker at 13:24 on 13 February 2011  Report this post
Thanks a lot, Bill.

Jennifer


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