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The Van Driver`s Wife

by tusker 

Posted: 23 September 2010
Word Count: 318
Summary: For Oonah's packing challenge


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She watches her husband drive away. Exhaust smoke from his black van lingers and seems to congeal with freezing fog. Looking out onto the garden, she gazes at a bare garden table set in the middle of an icy patio. Gone are the citronella lamps, dragon fly lights and forest green parasol. All are packed away in the garage. Pots and planters are nude of growth and colour. Geraniums, their bright red heads, only a memory of warmth and sunlight.

Now it seems that even autumn has packed away her mellow finery leaving behind a dreary canvas in wait for spring to revive nature’s current dowdiness. Only evergreens bushes and trees flaunt without competition until, once again, snowdrops emerge and crocus point their purple, yellow and white heads above cold earth once more.

Even, Seamus, the tortoise is hibernating in his upside down, tough plastic box under the bay tree. His bed of straw will keep him snug until the first warm rays of March rouse him from a deep sleep. In the corner of the garden, three ageing goldfish swim almost at the bottom of the pond, rarely coming up to the surface to snaffle at small drowning flies. The cold has put a stop to their aquatic frolics.

The cloud of exhaust has disappeared but fog remains. She worries about her young husband. Worries that he will stay safe driving along winter’s treacherous roads. He tells her she worries too much. Thinks too much. The baby stirs. She moves away from the window and starts wrapping Christmas presents which she’ll put under the tree.

She strokes her bulging stomach. Feels the baby kick. When her husband returns, she knows that with his homecoming, her fears will disappear. Then over dinner, they will make plans for their first child due at the end of January, and a family holiday on the Isle of Wight, the following summer.






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Desormais at 08:02 on 23 September 2010  Report this post
Lovely piece Jennifer, and an unusual take on 'packing'. The descriptions of a garden descending slowly into winter drabness create vivid imagery, underlining the sadness of the end of summer. And I loved the contrast between the decline of the year and the creation of new life for the beginning of the New Year. Well done!

Sandra

tusker at 08:50 on 23 September 2010  Report this post
Thanks Sandra.

Glad you enjoyed it.

Jennifer

Findy at 11:02 on 23 September 2010  Report this post
Lovely story Jennifer, an unusual take on packing. Lovely comparisons.

findy

M. Close at 12:01 on 23 September 2010  Report this post
Very nice Jennifer. The 2nd and 3rd paragraph seemed almost poetic. I really liked the take on packing away the colors and activity of sunner and settling down for winter.....a cold lonely place when the one you love is packed up and gone as well....But the coming spring bringing new life to the garden and the family.

Lots of double meaning here...very deep and thought provoking.....

Nice.

Mike

tusker at 14:47 on 23 September 2010  Report this post
Thanks Findy and Mike.

It's the way I feel about winter like the rest of us I assume.

Jennifer

CharlieMac at 15:44 on 26 September 2010  Report this post
A descriptive wonder! I really liked this Jennifer. Particularly as it is very much starting to feel that way right now with the garden 'packing up' for winter. Really lovely, well done.

Charlotte

tusker at 15:50 on 26 September 2010  Report this post
Many thanks Charlotte.

Glad you liked it.

Jennifer

jenzarina at 16:23 on 30 September 2010  Report this post
Nice cyclical tale. I enjoyed the descriptions very much.

<Added>

Oh, I don't think you need a comma between Even and Seamus.

tusker at 17:50 on 30 September 2010  Report this post
Thanks Jen.

Me and my commas!!!

Jennifer


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