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A Two Horse Race

by Laurence 

Posted: 03 August 2010
Word Count: 588
Summary: Challenge 212


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The office was abuzz with the rumour that a new post had been created with a hefty salary attached. Clearly the lucky candidate could be assured of a seat on the board and many other perks.

‘Hi John, heard the rumour?’ said Pete, John’s closest friend and confidant.

‘No one seems to be talking about anything else. Are you applying?’

‘Depends what it involves, it may not be my field of expertise,’ said Pete.

‘Get away Pete; you could put your hand to absolutely anything.’

‘Yeh, yeh. How about you?’

‘Might not be my field of expertise.’ Pete landed him a friendly punch on the arm.

John and Pete parted to their respective offices to begin the day’s transactions. Around eleven John received a call from the boss telling him to meet in the boardroom.

‘John come in,’ said Paul Rankin, a jovial guy in his mid-forties, stocky but fit. He stretched out a hand which John shook; it was a firm vice like grip. ‘Sit down John, we need to talk. No doubt you’ve heard the rumours.’ John was about to reply but Paul waved his hand to silence him. ‘It’s really only a two horse race yourself and Pete and I know who my moneys on. You’re buddies so you’ll know the problems he’s going through. The board needs someone really focused to run with this portfolio; it will require late nights to get it established. What do you say?’

‘It sounds exciting.’

‘There’s a but,’ queried Paul.

‘You said it was a two horse race – are you even going to give Pete a chance?’

‘John, John, of course I am. He’s got to feel he’s given it his best shot but if I’m honest I don’t think he’s up to the pressure right now. Problems!’ he said tapping the side of his squat nose.

‘I need some time.’

‘You take as long as you need.’


An hour later John found himself standing at the washbasins in the cloakroom contemplating the offer from PR; Pete emerged from one of the cubicles.

‘Had your chat with PR yet?’

‘Yes,’ said John trying not to give anything away.

‘How did you get on?’

‘Not bad I suppose. Pete can I ask? Are you having some problems?’ Pete’s boyish charm disappeared; he avoided John’s gaze. ‘Come on we’re buddies,’ he insisted.

Pete glanced in the direction of the cubicles checking the stalls were empty. ‘It’s my youngest.’

‘Emily?’

‘Yes. She’s been poorly of recent so Dawn took her to the doctor’s. It’s not good. She has leukaemia.’

‘Pete, I’m so sorry. Why didn’t you say?’ he said patting him on the back.

‘I thought could handle it on my own. Didn’t want to bring domestic problems to work,’ he said near to tears.

‘Pete this is not a domestic problem. This is your daughter we’re talking about.’

‘Don’t you think I know?’

‘If there is anything I can do? Anything?’ insisted John.

‘Short of paying for all her treatment! I have to handle this by myself thanks.’ He slammed the door after him.

John slammed his hand down on the washbasin. ‘Well you really handled that well John Griffin.’



The church clock struck six when John cleared his desk and switched off his computer. He saw PR hovering near the reception there was no avoiding him.

‘Well John – had plenty of time?’ he laughed as he clapped him on the back.

‘You said it was a two horse race, well this horse just got lame. Good night.’







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tusker at 07:27 on 04 August 2010  Report this post
A good story, Laurence.

Office politics and friendship colliding with ambition.

I felt though that the end result was obvious due to that friendship.

Maybe, John and Pete should just be colleagues with perhaps a little antagonism between them? John not liking, say, some of Pete's annoying habits? Then his gesture would cetainly be magnaminous.

One nit: 'slammed the door' and 'slammed his hand' close together.

Jennifer







Desormais at 08:42 on 04 August 2010  Report this post
Thank you Laurence. Good story.
Sandra

Laurence at 15:37 on 04 August 2010  Report this post
Thanks for your comments Jennifer - I guess I could have made the relationship between John and Pete a little more tetchy! Will consider this in a re-draft.

Thanks for reading Desormais kind of you to comment.

Laurence

M. Close at 02:38 on 08 August 2010  Report this post
Nice story Lawrence, I agree, I kinda saw it coming because of the friendship. but also, because of the challenge.....I knew there was going to be a magnanimous gesture here, and what could it be?

It is a fine story. Touching.

Mike



Desormais at 06:40 on 08 August 2010  Report this post
This was a good story, and I liked the "this horse just got lame" phrase. It was well written, I just thought it needed a bit more of a twist somehow to make it a little less obvious where it was going.

CharlieMac at 16:18 on 09 August 2010  Report this post
Hi Laurence, a well-rounded story. Funnily enough, I didn't expect this more obvious ending. In fact, I thought there might be a twist whereby Pete leads John into a false sense of pity about his daughter, to which John then gives up the job opportunity to a gleeful, lying, back-stabbing Pete (my crooked mind at play!) But then, I suppose you set the scene of friendship so well that this couldn't really happen?

Teeny weeny nit:
and I know who my moneys on
should be money's.

Thanks for the read!

Charlie


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