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Invaders

by tusker 

Posted: 13 July 2010
Word Count: 250
Summary: For Frances's 'city' challenge


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They come in their hordes. Caerdydd, divided by three rivers, unites under the Red Dragon flag that whips about in sleety frenzy. Past sounds of Roman and Norman invaders that once surged towards the rivers Taff, Ely and Rhymney, it seems, are still shouting their war cries in an attempt to conquer the rebellious Welsh tribes.

Today the castle looks down with benign strength at its people as it has done so for many centuries. The Taff still races past its walls, slapping against its sides, heading towards the sea and, if you listen, you can almost hear the ghostly, blood thirsty cries of Elizabethan pirates wielding and thrusting their cutlasses in dark extinct alleys that now boast modern, glass fronted apartments overlooking a marina crowded with expensive craft.

‘Oggie! Oggie! Oggie,!’ Full of Brains Bitter, Clark’s Pies and courage, the battle chant begins stirring up inbred passion and patriotism. Loud strains of Delilah merge with Cym Rhondda and Bread of Heaven, filling a cold afternoon’s gloom. Grown men swallow lumps in their throats in anticipation. Below them, inside the Millennium Stadium, the ceremonial goat has walked its circuit, the band has left the pitch, and battle is about to commence.

Now young Welsh men charge, kick, scrum and swear. Blankets of sweaty steam rise in white clouds amid churned up earth and grass. Expectant faces from above, bellow and cheer their zealous and loud encouragement that resounds upwards and across St. David’s Centre to Caerdydd Bay, Penarth and beyond.










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jenzarina at 18:48 on 13 July 2010  Report this post
Nice! Times really haven't changed...

V`yonne at 20:17 on 13 July 2010  Report this post
Takes me back, Jennifer but to The Arm's Park - a cathedral to rugby union You forgot the chips & salmomella from Caroline Street, butty vach!

tusker at 06:42 on 14 July 2010  Report this post
No Jen, they don't but the stadium is posher.

Jennifer

tusker at 06:45 on 14 July 2010  Report this post
Glad it brought back memories, Oonah.

Ah, those were the days. They don't pee on the guy in front anymore, either.

Jennifer

Bunbry at 12:31 on 14 July 2010  Report this post
This has got it all Jennifer, history, geography and modern references. Spot on!

The only thing I would change is 'inbred' cos I think of boys marrying their sisters and having kids with two heads! Try 'innate'

Nick

tusker at 14:44 on 14 July 2010  Report this post
Thanks Nick.

Don't you know we Welsh have 2 heads?

The wise head and the daft head. The latter head is usually tucked under our right arm tucking into laver bread and cockles.

Jennifer

Elbowsnitch at 17:18 on 14 July 2010  Report this post
wow - fantastic, Jennifer! From this I'd guess the city's word is battle or war! So full of energy - like an ancient and modern war song.

I'd argue that in the last sentence you don't need "zealous and loud" following "bellow and cheer".

Great flash!

Frances

tusker at 17:30 on 14 July 2010  Report this post
Thanks Frances.

I can see your point regarding zealous etc. But, in my head, I wanted to create a lot of sound. We're a noisy lot.

Jennifer

Laurence at 20:36 on 17 July 2010  Report this post
Great piece of writing with very vivid images. Loved the final paragraph.

Laurence

crowspark at 20:48 on 17 July 2010  Report this post
Great stuff, Jennifer. Where I live we have an English bridge and a Welsh bridge. Lots of Welsh place names in Shropshire as the border got pushed this way and that.

You capture the struggle well.

tusker at 07:12 on 18 July 2010  Report this post
Thanks Laurence and Bill.

Glad you both enjoyed it.

Jennifer


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