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food haikus

by didau 

Posted: 10 June 2010
Word Count: 26
Summary: My observations on cooking supper
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Grey shells moistly slide
into Thai green curry sauce
and gently pinken.

Rice boils in a pan
cumulus clouds form and drift
as the grains fatten.






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jenzarina at 20:40 on 10 June 2010  Report this post
I liked the second half best - to me it made me think of both the grains in the pan and the grains in the field, so you get an interesting perspective.

I think I'd prefer the first half without the word 'moistly', it didn't flow so well for me with it in.

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But prawn thai curry is one of my favourites, I'll be round about 7.00 with some Tiger beer?
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V`yonne at 21:13 on 10 June 2010  Report this post
5-7-5 and you know already what I'm going to say and I know already how you would respond and so I'll say no more than very nice and I can see those prawns cook inthe first but I think rice is best cooked by the absorption method and then the lid is on. Can I have pork instead of prawns please? Be round in half an hour...
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didau at 21:21 on 10 June 2010  Report this post
Ha!
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Findy at 08:48 on 11 June 2010  Report this post
Liked the first one David


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