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The Lot
Posted: 22 May 2010
Word Count: 33
Summary: Flash Poetry 88 - my wee little nature flash
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birdsong,
earth soft underfoot
years of oak leaf, pine needle
decomposed
covered in moss
tufts of grass, wild flowers
forgotten wilderness
haven of nature
until they dug it out
to build
a house.
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 didau at 19:23 on 22 May 2010
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I like it, but is decomposted a word? Would decomposed be better? All very earthy
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 V`yonne at 22:44 on 22 May 2010
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I like it. I think
should just be composted
covered in moss
tufts of grass, wild flowers
I think you don't need the next line and this one is more poetic
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Nella at 08:58 on 23 May 2010
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Ooops, thanks for pointing that out! I don't think it's a word, either. Really should learn to use my dictionary!!
You're also right about that line, Oonah. Just stuck it in because I had it. But it's really not needed.
robin
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 crowspark at 15:54 on 23 May 2010
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Hi Robin
I love the sense of the decomposing leaves and insects, the softness of the leaf litter, moss and wild flowers.
Great atmosphere. Thanks for the read.
Bill
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Nella at 15:17 on 25 May 2010
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Thanks, Kirsty, Bill, for reading and the kind comments.
Robin
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