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White Lies

by Bunbry 

Posted: 15 February 2010
Word Count: 666
Summary: For the Sci Fi challenge.


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Graham sat on his verandah in the warm evening air, watching as the sky darkened. His daughter Jess, ten months old now, was asleep in his arms.

“Would you like a beer, Hon?”

Graham looked up at his pretty wife at the door, love in her eyes. He replied with a smile and a nod. He had known Lucy for five years and, by his reckoning, he had told her six lies.

They had met in a park one autumn day when their respective dogs bounded off together, forming an instant friendship.

“Hi, I’m Graham, Graham Brown.” His first lie. His next came three weeks later when over their first meal together (which Lucy had suggested when it became obvious he never would), he informed her that he had been born and educated in Oxford. The lies came easily.

Lucy arrived with the beer which he accepted gratefully. She ruffled his hair, then sat in her chair next to him and picked up her latest novel.

Lie number three came the same evening when he told her he was just eighteen months older than she was. He could not even begin to imagine how she would react if she knew the truth. But he supposed even that lie might be eclipsed by the fact that they were not married. They had of course been through the ceremony, a grand affair in Lucy’s home village with all her friends and family there watching proudly. Even without his bogus details though, Graham knew that the vicar would have declared the marriage void had he known the truth.

Jess stirred, opened her eyes and looked up at her father. She had not said her first word yet, but Graham could see her lips moving as she practiced making vowel sounds while he cooed back with encouragement. Looking up he saw that Lucy was watching them both. She giggled at being noticed and went back to her book still grinning.

His final two lies had perhaps been the most difficult to conceal. He had not financed their comfortable lifestyle from working in the anthropology department at the local university and, while it was certainly an interest, maintaining the charade did not come easily. But perhaps the most audacious untruth was the ‘rare endocrine disorder’ which, three times a year, meant a month-long trip to Germany to a private specialist. In reality, Graham had never been to Germany, using the time instead to return to visit his parents and old life, of which Lucy knew nothing.

Graham glanced at Lucy whose eyes had closed. He decided that tonight he would do it, before time ran out. Silently he stood, Jess in his arms, and, walking quickly, he left his garden and was soon standing in the field at the rear of his house.

“Hey Jess, I’ve something to show you.” He pointed into the pitch black sky, unpolluted by street lighting, at a group of stars barely visible to the naked eye. “I love your mum with all my heart, but can never let her know what I’m about to tell you. And I can never tell you again after today, but I must at least once. I am from one of those stars in that faint group. They are called The Pleiades.” He hoped that her young developing brain would register the information at some subconscious level because his love for her overwhelmed him in a way he could never have imagined, and deceiving her too would break his heart.

Behind him was a noise.

“Graham, what are you up to out here?” There was no concern in Lucy's voice, just curiosity.

“Just showing Jess the stars. Look, there’s The Pleiades.”

A tiny frown formed on Lucy’s brow, as if trying to recall a forgotten memory.

“No, you’ve got that wrong love. They are called The Seven Sisters. I learned that at school.”

“Oh yes,” replied Graham, a small smile forming. “I mean, what would I know about such things?”






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tusker at 07:31 on 16 February 2010  Report this post
A lovely tranquil scene, Nick, but beneath the surface, a secret your MC must not reveal.

It's said that we're made up from matter that once came from Outer Space but your MC arrived in a mysterious manner.

This has made me curious. I want to know more. How he came to Earth and what will happen to him and his family in the future.

His child is half alien so maybe she will inherit his knowledge.

A nit pick: there are 2 'nows' close together at the start. It sort of jarred. 1 in the 1st para and the other 3rd.

I think this could be the beginnings of a longer story but it's good as it is too.

Jennifer







Forbes at 10:11 on 16 February 2010  Report this post
Nice one Nick.

One pick - and ask the others about this:

Lie number three came the same evening when he told her was just eighteen months older than her.


Should that be

Lie number three came the same evening when he told her was just eighteen months older than she.


as there is an implied (was) after the last pronoun?

I agree with Jen - nice start to a much longer story.

Cheers

Avis

Findy at 10:22 on 16 February 2010  Report this post
Hi Nick

Nice story, agree with the others, this seems like a part of a longer story, I would like to know more.

findy

Prospero at 12:15 on 16 February 2010  Report this post
Great story, Nick. I really enjoyed it.

Best

John

Bunbry at 12:35 on 16 February 2010  Report this post
Thanks Jennifer, it is said that the only place that the atoms we are made of could be manufactured would be inside a star. So in fact we are all made of stardust!!

I have fixed that nit. Thanks for the kind comments.

Nick

Bunbry at 12:37 on 16 February 2010  Report this post
Hi Avis, I have fixed that nit - thanks!

I have continued a couple of flashes recently, so who knows where this one will go!

Nick

Bunbry at 12:40 on 16 February 2010  Report this post
Findy, a good start would be to try and spot the Pleaides yourself! They are so faint that you can only just make them out but it is a lovely sight.
Thanks for the kind comments.

Nick

Bunbry at 12:41 on 16 February 2010  Report this post
Cheers John!

Nick

V`yonne at 11:15 on 18 February 2010  Report this post
That's a nice story, Nick. I love that star cluster. It's about 8 light years away I think - not far in cosmic terms but I don't think it has any goldilocks zones in it. Of course he may not be humanoid originally... Anyway I agree this could go longer.

Crimsondelilah at 12:10 on 18 February 2010  Report this post
Lovely story Nick. I love how you've inserted the sci-fi into such a peaceful domestic scene. I think the end is wonderfully ironic - "What would I know about such things". Not sure if I want to know what happens. I kind of like it just the way it is.

Laurence at 12:11 on 18 February 2010  Report this post
Great piece of writing Nick. I was drawn into the story and felt there was some underlining secret which I wanted to know but I didn't jump to the end to satisfy my curiosity. Like the others I think this could be the start of a much longer piece. I would also like to know how he arrived? I hop it wasn't a small silver disc!!!!

Cheers

Laurence

Bunbry at 18:58 on 18 February 2010  Report this post
Oonah, you sound like a real space enthusiast just like myself! I could talk for hours on what might be out there. If we find alien life in this solar system (and we just might as there a few places it could be) then the ramifications will be enormous!

Nick

Bunbry at 19:01 on 18 February 2010  Report this post
Thanks Margaret you are very kind.

Nick

Bunbry at 19:04 on 18 February 2010  Report this post
Laurence,how did he arrive?! This is where you have to start believing in worm holes and such things, as to travel by conventional means would be too slow!

Thanks for the kind comments

Nick

V`yonne at 20:39 on 18 February 2010  Report this post
I'm a sad old Trekkie and an avid follower of all things NASA including the Picture of the day in BwS - I even bought 3D specs so I could see the standy outy ones - that's a technical term few will recognise except us space nerds ;

Bunbry at 13:04 on 19 February 2010  Report this post
Sorry Oonah, even I don't know about Standy outy ones! Are they belly buttons?! Ha ha.

Do you think life will be found in our solar system?

Do you think there is life anywhere but Earth?

And the real biggy - is there life out there technically advanced enough to rival humans??

I will tell you what I think later!

Nick

V`yonne at 17:32 on 19 February 2010  Report this post
You ought to get some 3D specs though - some of the ISS pics are stunning as are the Mars Rover...

Answer 1. Perhaps Earth? Seriously - if you're talking bacterial/viral yes - I think that's there.

Ans 2. If not - I think it would be an awful waste of space... I know that's CONTACT

3. Probably but distances are so vast I don't think we'll ever contact them or they us no matter how technologically advanced they are. Everything out there is looking back in time and so the time factors are equally vast so... I think about it but it meses with my brain It's like theoretical Maths you know - Infinity and that stuff. My wee finite cells can't take to it.

Sean will now tell you they are here already. If he can introduce me to one I'll believe that - not otherwise.

Bunbry at 19:37 on 19 February 2010  Report this post
Re UFO's and stuff - Extraordinary claims need extraordinary evidence!!

My Answers

1. I would love to find microbes on Mars or somewhere as their DNA would be so different from ours (assuming they have a version of DNA) which would tell us sooo much about life and how likely it is to appear else where.

2. If no microbes are found nearby, we might could conclude we are a complete random fluke event and we could be unique in having a planet with life. Fred Hoyle once worked out the odds of organic molecules coming together by chance and looked at in that way, life is impossible!!

3 Assuming life is out there - look how long dinosaus lived without becoming technological. Same can be said of sea creatures and of every species on our planet bar one! And even man only gained radios and things in one part of the globe(Europe) while the rest of the world was not going in that direction. So 'No' is my answer!!

Prospero at 07:32 on 20 February 2010  Report this post
Hi Guys

I have 'encountered' one or two, but as yet haven't had a chance to engage them in conversation.

Best

Sean

Jubbly at 09:52 on 20 February 2010  Report this post
Lovely concept, a sort of sci fi version of Bewitched. This - He had known Lucy for five years and, by his reckoning, he had told her six lies, is such a great line and would make a brilliant opening line for a novel or story.

J

Jumbo at 10:21 on 20 February 2010  Report this post
Nick

Great writing, as always form you! A brilliant take on the prompt and cleverly crafted.

No pics and thanks for the read. I really enjoyed it.

Cheers

john

Bunbry at 12:09 on 20 February 2010  Report this post
Julie, thanks for the lovely comments!

I remember Bewitched with fondness. There were some wonderful American shows around that time - Gilligan's Island, The Adams Family, The Beverly Hillbillies etc

Nick

Bunbry at 12:11 on 20 February 2010  Report this post
Cheers John, you are very kind. But as I remember you once saying, coming up with a new story so regularly is extreemly difficult and I have found myself struggling recently.

Nick

Jumbo at 12:23 on 20 February 2010  Report this post
Nick

Yes, and I'm also struggling at the moment - hence my 'retread' and recent limited appearances on the site.

But I am certain that the muse has not totally deserted me - not yet, anyway!! And, so it appears, the same is with you.

Keep up the good work, as they say!!

Cheers

john

crowspark at 11:32 on 21 February 2010  Report this post
Excellent writing, Nick.
I found the opening too sugary for my taste but that may be just me.

Good luck with this.

Bill

Bunbry at 12:59 on 21 February 2010  Report this post
Cheers Bill, thanks for those kind words. And no need for luck, this was published ages ago!

Nick


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