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Broken mirror
Posted: 16 November 2003
Word Count: 112
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From an eastern window passing -
A silent call as I walk by
‘Look deep into my reflection
Stare me squarely in the eye’
I feign blindness to your wishes
Yet toward your voice I turn
‘To capture this elusive treasure
Say the one small word we yearn…
…manifest our virtual pleasure
I am yours, I am the one’
A moment of indecision
All is lost to time, and gone
Into a million pieces
A thousand things now smash and break
And when the starburst is over
Unseen amongst the bric-a-brac
Through the purple light, that glistens
Remains one splintered silver shard
In the afterglow of echoes
Lies that lonely little word
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 Ellenna at 10:32 on 16 November 2003
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beautiful..as if a moment of realisation had been captured.. time stood still.. utterly poignant ..just a lovely lovely poem...
Ellie..
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bluesky3d at 10:43 on 16 November 2003
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ta Ellie... great to know you liked that one... a touch of the Snow White's :o)
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 Dee at 12:02 on 16 November 2003
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Andrew, I don't normally comment on poems because I'm not a poet so don't feel qualified, but this has really touched a chord in me. It's quite beautiful. Something about its rhythm reminds me of Swinburne. Have you read any of his poems?
Dee.
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bluesky3d at 18:15 on 16 November 2003
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Dee, I hadn't read any Swinburn for a while. I have just read some following your comment and can see what you mean.
Victorian poets to our modern sensibiilty, can often seem hackneyed, crass and dated. So perhaps certain rhythms and rhymes are difficult in contemporary poetry because they refer back to earlier times... whether we want them to or not.
As an exercise I might try this in blank verse and see what happens to it - However if it has echoes of the misty ghosts of the past then it may be appropriate to the subject matter.
Pleased it touched a chord with you - hmmm was it an E minor?
Andrew :o)
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... a touch of the Gothick about it?
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Dee at 18:46 on 16 November 2003
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Hi Andrew,
Not so much Gothick as Pagan.
Know what you mean about Victorian poets but Swinburne had a lovely off-beat pace to some of his more pagan pieces. I love Hertha... 'before God was, I am.' makes me shiver.
Dee.
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bluesky3d at 19:22 on 16 November 2003
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Dee
I read Hertha - yes - see where you're coming from... the goddess of fertility, "Mother Earth." I note Swinburne wrote: "another mystic atheistic democratic anthropologic poem" - wow!
Has there been any psycho-analysis carried out on his work? - maybe he was hidebound by Victorian guilt over his atheism, because if I counted correctly, he mentions God 14 times in the Hertha poem!
Could that be a sort of inverted over- compensation for writing an athesistic poem - weird or what?
Andrew :o)
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Dee at 20:06 on 16 November 2003
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Hell, I don't know, Andrew. I just like reading it.
:o)
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