Login   Sign Up 



 
Archive » Tmog » Work
Archive »  Poetry » General » Work

Too nice a man

by Tmog 

Posted: 03 November 2009
Word Count: 116
Summary: and now for something different, it reads very fast
Font Size
 


Printable Version
Print Double spaced


I want to be a tight man
a fight man
a get it when I can man
a hard man
a ladies man
a take it when it's their man
a bad man
a cad man
a wham bam and thank you man
I want to be a flirt man
a take a bit of skirt man
a tart man
a slapper man
a kiss em quick and part man
I want to be a cheat man
a cheap man
a slip between the sheets man
a creep man
a street man
a leering smutty beer man
I want to be a cold man
an iceman,

but you say i'm too nice a man!


T Morgan










Favourite this work Favourite This Author


Comments by other Members



NicciF at 09:18 on 18 November 2009  Report this post
Hi Tony

This is great fun, and has a lovely rythm and pace when read quickly as per your instructions. Full of humour and cliches but it works for me.

Only 1 nit.

but you say i'm to nice a man!

Shouldn't this be "too"?

Nicci
Helpful (0) Made Me Think (0) Made Me Smile (0) Pure Genius (0)

SarahT at 21:48 on 18 November 2009  Report this post
Hi Tony,

I agree that it's a good fun rhyme. It is interesting hearing this sort of thing expressed by a man - it is usually women who worry about trying to emulate the unattainable! I think that is one of the strengths of the poem, to be honest.

I have only got one picky point. I wasn't sure whether this was a typo.

it's their man


Did you mean 'their' (in which case it would be indicating possession by the ladies from the previous line, I suppose) or 'there' as in a place?

S
Helpful (0) Made Me Think (0) Made Me Smile (0) Pure Genius (0)

FelixBenson at 11:49 on 19 November 2009  Report this post
This is great to read aloud, Tony, well done.
Helpful (0) Made Me Think (0) Made Me Smile (0) Pure Genius (0)

Tmog at 15:03 on 19 November 2009  Report this post
Thanks for all comments, it was a bit of a tongue in cheek modern kind of thing. Not what i normally do...... Ha bet you all wonder what i'm really like now?........... Well i'm the nice man at the end, so i'm told.
Helpful (0) Made Me Think (0) Made Me Smile (0) Pure Genius (0)

NicciF at 10:02 on 20 November 2009  Report this post
I never thought overwise Tony, not even for a second!

Nicci
Helpful (0) Made Me Think (0) Made Me Smile (0) Pure Genius (0)

James Graham at 20:12 on 21 November 2009  Report this post
Seem to have missed this one - now glad I didn't! You worked with repetition in 'Escape' - which is different of course, more serious - but this is a riot of repetitions, echoes, rhymes and half-rhymes. It works wonderfully. And there's a ring of truth in it - even a nice man such as yourself (and myself) has moments of longing to be 'a wham bam and thank you man'. Excellent.

James.
Read the WriteWords interview with James Graham
Helpful (0) Made Me Think (0) Made Me Smile (0) Pure Genius (0)


To post comments you need to become a member. If you are already a member, please log in .

 






Other work by Tmog:      ...view all work by Tmog