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Playing Away

by tusker 

Posted: 16 September 2009
Word Count: 712
Summary: For Findy's Challenge: football and monotonous


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Jason, aged eleven, hated football. Tony, his father, aged thirty five, adored the game. Jason enjoyed his play station, nature and orientation. Tony considered those past-times a little weird for his only son.

‘Why don’t you play for the under 14’s,’ Tony would keep suggesting.

‘Haven’t got the legs for football, Dad,’ Jason always replied under the glare of his father’s disapproving eye.

In February, Jason and his father set off to see their local team play against Tonwich. For Jason time spent on a coach seemed a monotonous ordeal. But, with the promise that his father would buy him a new game for his play station, Jason, with reluctance, agreed to accompany him.

On the coach, surrounded by singing and shouts of ‘Come on,The Dragons!’ Jason played games on his mobile.

‘Show some enthusiasm, lad,’ Tony hissed at him through the corner of his mouth.

Absorbed, Jason didn’t hear the rebuke. When he received a nudge in his ribs, he looked up and met his father’s glowering gaze.

‘Sing will you,’ Tony muttered. ‘The others will think I’ve got a geek for a kid.’ So Jason mouthed the words to the club’s anthem while his fingers worked at his mobile.

An hour and twenty minutes later, they arrived at Tonwich Football Ground as grey clouds relieved themselves of heavy snow.

‘Bloody hell,’ his father said as fifty of his fellow football fanatics poured out from the coach, all heading for the turn stiles.

Morose, Jason walked beside him, his teeth aching as an easterly blast whipped cartons and flyers around his feet.

‘Bloody hell,’ his father repeated as they went through the turn stiles. ‘Bloody, bloody hell,’ his father continued to groan as spectators congregated on the stands, arms wrapped around bodies like Egyptian Mummies.

On both sides, supporters had scarves up and over mouths and noses. Feet stamped trying to keep the icy chill from throbbing toes. Snow began to cover the pitch like a white tarpaulin. Minutes ticked by until the whistle for kick off.

Then through the whine of a gale, the crowd, resembling hundreds of snowmen, let out a collective groan. The game had been cancelled due to the severe weather conditions.

Speechless, through a blizzard, Jason and Tony slipped and slithered out from the grounds, and made their way back to the coach where the driver, his nose red and dripping, told his mournful passengers that the motorway had been blocked with snow.

Jason looked at his father. Tony looked at his son. ‘I spotted a Travel Lodge just down the road,’ Jason told him.

‘Better get over there before the others have the same idea.’ Tony grabbed his hand but, minutes later, got disorientated.

‘Follow me,’ Jason said with confidence, guiding his father over a railing concealed by a snow drift and, for once, his father didn’t argue as if too numbed by the cold and disappointment.

Quarter of an hour later, with the aid of Jason’s knowledge of orientation, they arrived at the Travel Lodge. Falling in through the doors, Tony hugged his son as if he’d been saved him from the jaws of death.

At reception, Tony booked a room for two nights. Shivering, both man and boy headed for bedroom number 201, stumbling though the door into what felt like a hot house in the Sahara Desert.

‘What a bloody day!’ Tony exclaimed, his lips turning from un-natural blue to healthy pink.

‘What a day,’ Jason agreed, eyeing the TV’s blank screen.

That night, as the wind howled and snow kept falling, Jason and his father rested in a comfortable but reasonably priced bedroom. Beside the hotel, they'd spotted a Harry Ramsden's and decided, after a hot shower, they’d have a fish and chip supper.

After supper, Tony watched Jason playing on his mobile while the TV flickered hissing static. Then Tony had a go at Jason’s mobile, leaving his son staring at a screen flecked with white like the snow that continued to fall, outside.

When they eventually arrived home, three days later, Jason was already looking forward to the Spring. His father promised he'd take him camping on the Brecon Beacons. Then in August, he’d book a weekend at an Orientation Course set in the scenic depths of Mid Wales.







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Prospero at 15:55 on 16 September 2009  Report this post
I'm a Rugger bugger meself, so a footer game getting snowed off is no surprise, bunch of nancies

I once missed an entire England-Wales Schoolboy International that was palyed in thick fog. I don't how they figured out who won.
Good story about a father who gained a new appreciation for his son and his son's esoteric skills.

Best

Prosp

tusker at 16:11 on 16 September 2009  Report this post
Thanks John.

I prefer Rugby. Travelled all the way to Bristol for a game, years ago. Travelled back next day and had to stop 7 miles away from home.
We walked through snow drifts as high as hedges. Our town was cut off for many days.

When I think back, I still wonder how we made it.

Jennifer




Prospero at 19:04 on 16 September 2009  Report this post
Wow. Jennifer, that is awesome. I have heard of people dying over much shorter distances. You have a story to tell there.

Best

Prosp

Laurence at 21:18 on 16 September 2009  Report this post
Enjoyed your story - felt for the poor kid being dragged alon by his father!! Loved some of the images!!

Quality time to follow.

Laurence

V`yonne at 22:33 on 16 September 2009  Report this post
I remeber being snowed i after the Wales/France match in 1978 - I believe - we got the last Taxi to St Andrew's Cross - very snug ;

tusker at 15:52 on 17 September 2009  Report this post
Thanks Laurence. Glad you liked it.

Jennifer

tusker at 15:55 on 17 September 2009  Report this post
Oonah, I wonder what the driver saw in the back of his cab on that snowy journey!!!

We've been snowed in twice. I often wish it would happen again. I keep the freezer stocked up in case, and of course, wine and rollies etc.

Jennifer

V`yonne at 20:23 on 17 September 2009  Report this post
Jennifer - you bad girl. Noel always sits up front with the driver - always has... even before we were married - mmmm odd!

Findy at 18:05 on 20 September 2009  Report this post
Hi Jennifer

A lovely, heartwarming story, enjoyed very much

Was wondering whether -

with the aid of Jason’s orientation skills


would be better than -

with the aid of Jason’s knowledge of orientation


Lovely descriptions.

findy



FelixBenson at 18:44 on 20 September 2009  Report this post
Hi Jennifer,

I really enjoyed this - funny how much parents have to be taught by their children - and i thought this was neatly encapsulated in the story. A frozen day but a heartwarming tale.

Cheers, Kirsty

tusker at 07:32 on 21 September 2009  Report this post
Thanks Findy.

You're right, it sounds better the way you suggested.

Jennifer

tusker at 07:33 on 21 September 2009  Report this post
Thanks Kirsty.

For once I came up with a happy story.

Jennifer

LMJT at 10:35 on 24 September 2009  Report this post
Hi Jennifer,

Sorry I'm late reading this piece.

This is a really touching story with a strong beginning, middle and end. I liked the dialogue between father and son, and the last paragraph in which the older has a new understanding/appreciation for the younger.

The only thing I didn't think worked was in the first line:

Jason, aged eleven, hated football. Tony, his father, aged thirty five,

I wonder if there would be a better way to get their ages in. Also, is the father's age really that relevant?

Thanks for the read.

Liam

tusker at 14:45 on 24 September 2009  Report this post
I suppose their ages aren't relevant, Liam.

Those 2 sentences were sort of printed in my head when I read the theme, and they kick started the story. Excuse the pun.

Often I have a mental sentence or see a picture which leads me on. Frequently, I write them down. I've a book of sentences/pictures, unused.

Thanks for your kind comments.

Jennifer


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