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Never go back part 1

by peterxbrown 

Posted: 09 November 2003
Word Count: 57
Summary: Its a mistake to go back ..................
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The brightest days and burnished treasured haunts
Are memories of a green imagined youth
The tempting whispered words are callous taunts
Which challenge you to disregard the truth.

Ignore the siren Spectre's sixties songs!
The pastel shadings of a mirage past
Your long remembered loves are swiftly gone
When you awake from dreams which could not last.






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Fearless at 08:29 on 10 November 2003  Report this post
Peter

Perhaps it's there or not there - just leave it be and walk on and live new dreams. Lovely lyric. Write on.

Woz
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pene at 17:57 on 11 November 2003  Report this post
Peter

i really enjoyed this, look forward to reading some more!
best wishes Pene
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Account Closed at 20:07 on 13 December 2003  Report this post
And so true!! Lovely cynicism here, and the use of rhyme is great - reminds me a bit of the humorous bits of Byron. More please!!

Anne B
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Seahorse at 12:40 on 25 February 2004  Report this post
I've only just come across this but I love it; I too think it is significantly enhanced by the use of rhyme. Very poignant and thought-provoking. Summoned up a few long-forgotten pastel mirages, too.
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LONGJON at 10:27 on 27 February 2004  Report this post
G'day Peter,

Dantes' worst torment, wasn't it, to have recognised happiness after it had passed!

Well done.
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gard at 13:51 on 25 April 2004  Report this post
Hi Peterxbrown

this has an absolutely excellent rhythm and flow, very classical, reminded me of say one of the romantics (Keats or the like)...

simply lovely


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