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Fantasies
Posted: 07 April 2009
Word Count: 24
Summary: For the Flash Poetry Challenge. Take the first verse on its own, if you like, as it includes all the elements!
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Swaying
I forgive the echo
of fallen
leaves
Turning
I understand the draw
of nature’s
might
Living
I try to maximise
my unknown
dreams
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 Nella at 13:39 on 08 April 2009
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Yes, great structure. I'm not sure I really understand what the first stanza says, but it sounds beautiful! And that's what counts here.
Robin
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 joanie at 17:52 on 08 April 2009
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Thanks, Robin. I have no idea what the first stanza means either - it just came out as a result of the exercise. I am going to stick to the 'Emperor's new clothes' idea and claim that it has a very deep philosophical meaning! Glad it sounds beautiful to you!
joanie
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Nella at 18:38 on 08 April 2009
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I'm glad you don't have any idea, either, Joanie! But it came from inner inspiration, so it must have a deep meaning! Isn't poetry wonderful? As long as it SOUNDS good....!
Robin
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 FelixBenson at 00:12 on 09 April 2009
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I like the form you have used here - it sort of seems to underline the certainty of the words, and the sentiment of acceptance and hope which (i think?) runs through the piece.
Possibly I should leave analysis of the first stanza alone...leave it in its beatiful -sounding mystery, but I can't resist ... I took it to sum up this theme of acceptance - with 'swaying' (to life's beat- I thought ...i.e going with the flow...) and I took:I forgive the echo
of fallen
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to mean forgiving the time has passed and continues to pass...but perhaps that's just me...Anyway I like this poem very much, for the tone, form and sentiment (well the one I've assumed!)
Cheers, Kirsty
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joanie at 06:56 on 09 April 2009
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Thanks, Kirsty! That makes sense, I think. 'Acceptance' is what I was aiming for.
joanie
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Findy at 15:33 on 09 April 2009
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Joanie, I loved the first lines and the second and the third 
The poem seems to have some deep philosophical meaning, urging the reader to go through it again and again, searching
Gosh everyone's come up with such great poems, loved them all.
findy
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