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The daily grind

by joanie 

Posted: 09 March 2009
Word Count: 44
Summary: For the Flash Poetry challenge this week
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Whispers of
dandelion clocks drift
earthward while

at my door
the wind breathes its message:
‘Enjoy life!’

Time holds sway
as the rollercoaster
dips and swerves

till one day
the effervescent trail
dissolves and

ironing
my white shirt for work, I
submit to

reality.






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FelixBenson at 00:30 on 10 March 2009  Report this post
Oh no!
Reality.
And what symbolises it better than ironing the white shirt for work?? Argh. Expertly done, Joanie. We can all identify with that one. And the rollercoaster works really well to signify time passing too.
Ireally like this:
the effervescent trail


a great image.

Another good 'un.

Cheers, Kirsty
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joanie at 00:32 on 10 March 2009  Report this post
Thanks, Kirsty! Glad you liked it.

joanie
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V`yonne at 00:43 on 10 March 2009  Report this post
I thought that too - nothing like ironing a shirt for work to bring a dose of reality to life BUMP
Read the WriteWords interview with Oonah Joslin (V`yonne)
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Findy at 06:20 on 10 March 2009  Report this post
Dreamer brought back to reality

Nice...and so quick Joanie...I am really amazed.

Loved the effervescent trail dissolving.

findy
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Nella at 07:59 on 10 March 2009  Report this post
Beautiful, Joanie, you've done it again with great expertise.
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joanie at 08:27 on 10 March 2009  Report this post
Oonah, Findy, Robin... thank you!

joanie
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BaMc at 21:28 on 13 March 2009  Report this post
Great image there Joanie, the Time, the rollercoaster, poised to descend all too swiftly with the rest of one's life -AARRGH!! Effective dry tone with the image too of ironing - double AARRGH!!

Barbara
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joanie at 23:58 on 13 March 2009  Report this post
Thanks, Barbara!
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