The Artists Pitch
Posted: 07 March 2009
Word Count: 139
Summary: This flash tries to show in a light hearted way that art is a business, and to be a good artist you generally need a good business sense!
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“This can be done in many different forms, painting, photography, video, writing.” The Dragons stared back at Henry, as he choked on his words. Sweat dripped through his sideburns.
“So you say people want this stuff? And there’s people willing to make it? Do you have the figures?”
“Ehm no figures, not yet.” His nervousness showing through.
“So you want me to invest £50,000 for 20%? And you have no figures, I’m sorry. I’m out.”
That was one down, closely followed by 2 more, only 2 Dragons left.
“So this ‘art’ is it a sustainable business? What are your profit margins?”
“I’m not sure, you just kind of, you know, it comes naturally and if works it works.”
“I’m sorry this is ridiculous, I’m out.”
“Me to.” All 5 Dragons not wanting to invest in Henry or his invention.
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 rosiedlm at 14:39 on 07 March 2009
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Very funny. Those Dragons don't know much about the creative mind unless its being creative with numbers.
Best,
Rosie
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Forbes at 15:10 on 07 March 2009
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Good take. I was a little confused as to who was speaking what at first. until I got to ...I'm out. Then I picked it up.
Hello and welcome. I don't think I've read you before? I enjoyed this.
Cheers
Avis 
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...err sorry one tiny pick. There should be an apostrophe in the title. Sorry! I'm off to pick nits.
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Nella at 10:15 on 08 March 2009
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Good take on the challenge, Keith. Amusing, but clearly showing the downside of art - the dreary financial aspects.
Best,
Robin
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 Prospero at 13:58 on 08 March 2009
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Hi Keith
Nice idea, but not a story as such as their is no evident narrative growth.
In effect you could shorten this to: Henry showed his invention, the Dragon's thought it was crap, Henry left.
I would have liked to see some character development and possibly a twist. For example if your MC had been called George, he could have slain the Dragons and then sold the warehouse for millions as Action Art.
Just a thought
Best
Prosp
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Forbes at 16:19 on 08 March 2009
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I like that idea too, John.
Avis
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Keith, you might want to tweak this along those lines, and try getting it published. I'm sure it would be.
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That would be calling the MC George that is.
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Nik Perring at 19:02 on 08 March 2009
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But Jon, this does tell a story and story doesn't always have to mean character development, does it?
Nik
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keithhodges at 11:54 on 09 March 2009
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hi, thanks guys, I'm fairly new to flash so all your comments are taken on board and very much appreciated!
i do find that character development can help a story, but i feel with this peice that it's trying to portray the message and the characters are a canvas for this? am i wrong in doing so! Help!!
keith xx
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tusker at 19:28 on 11 March 2009
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Hi Keith,
Sorry I'm late with this.
I get what you're doing, and of course those not living in this country might not know of the programme, Dragons Den. But I enjoyed this.
You've got the guy sweating as he tries to sell himself and his grand idea, but I'm not sure what he was trying to sell.
Jennifer
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Findy at 06:43 on 12 March 2009
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Ahh tv programme, that's why I could'nt understand what was going on...could make a mental image of the whole business but could'nt quite place it right, liked the flow of the story, nice
findy
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 V`yonne at 17:20 on 13 March 2009
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Hello, I didn't really get it becasue of the TV thing either but I liked the scepticism.
One pick “Me to.” should be too.
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