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No. 6, The Parade.

by tusker 

Posted: 04 February 2009
Word Count: 448
Summary: For flash 1 challenge: lock and key


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Every morning, Matthew sat on an ornate chest looking out of the bay window to watch pedestrians pass by his Georgian house, and as he watched, he stroked a gold key that hung from a red velvet ribbon around his neck.

Sometimes, if a passer by glanced up, they’d meet Matthew’s gaze. Though they were unable to see the colour of those dead grey eyes, they shivered as if sensing a primeval presence.

Over countless years Matthew, who lived at No. 6, The Parade, had never seemed to age. Past and present residents, living in that quiet road, considered Matthew a mystery, but for some odd reason that was how they wished it to remain.

Every night, as Matthew paced his home, not a solitary soul could imagine his terrible compulsion to sate a raging thirst. At its peak, once a month, during the hours of darkness, he left his home moving like a black wraith through silent streets towards the park.

There under the shelter of a bandstand, a few homeless people slept. There he watched those sleeping bodies before selecting the youngest and healthiest. What gender he selected made no difference to him.

Thankful they’d been offered food, warmth and shelter, the victim followed Matthew back to his home anxious for the promised reward of an ample meal and a fine bottle of Chablis.

After the victim had relaxed in a hot, fragrant bath, been fed and had drunk the wine, they were shown to a bedroom. Overcome with inexplicable weariness, they tumbled onto a four poster bed, instantly falling into a drug induced sleep that numbed both their minds and bodies.

Once insensible, Matthew, with expertise, sliced into his comatose victim’s main artery to gorge on delicious blood, and as he did so, a life preserving force surged through his marrow, sinews and veins; a life force that kept him from ageing.

Once his victims bodies were drained, Matthew cut out their hearts, and placed them inside the chest, turning the gold key in its lock with a shuddering sigh of orgasmic elation. Down in the cellar, he buried his victims bodies in dank, evil smelling earth that writhed fat, pink worms.

Now eight days after his latest bloody frenzy, he was plagued, not by a growing, life-giving thirst, but debilitating cramps, nausea and lethargy. Frightened, Matthew dared to look in a mirror and was met with the terrible gaze of an ancient man.

Reeling away from the vision, he was struck with an awful knowledge; a knowledge that brought a wolf-like howl from his mouth.

That sweet blonde youth, his last victim, he realised in terror, had been infected by some new, destructive virus.






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Bunbry at 19:31 on 04 February 2009  Report this post
A little cracker yet again Jennifer, kept me intriqued all the way through. The olny bit I might think about again is
some new, destructive virus of the blood.
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It sounds a very 'medical' phrase for a layman. Perhaps 'terrible disease' or similar.

Nick

tusker at 07:48 on 05 February 2009  Report this post
Thanks Nick.

Will do as advised.

Jennifer

V`yonne at 10:36 on 05 February 2009  Report this post
I agree with Nick. That has to be had carried some new pestilence of mankind... or something ;

word missing.
a wolf-like howl from mouth.


tusker at 11:50 on 05 February 2009  Report this post
Oops, thanks Oonah.

Jennifer

Jordan789 at 00:20 on 06 February 2009  Report this post
this is cool! The only suggestion I would make is to give the victim a name, and make it the victim's story. Perhaps change it to the present tense to add some immediacy. This is really interesting.

perhaps if we learn what illness the victim has, then we'll know the fate of the attacker.

Jordan

tusker at 06:15 on 06 February 2009  Report this post
Thanks Jordan.

There were so many victims so I didn't want to personalise the last.

To MC there were fodder like humans eating beef.

Will consider your advise though.

Jennifer

tiger_bright at 13:29 on 06 February 2009  Report this post
Nasty, Jennifer! Such rich details, especially that chest of hearts. Yuk! I spotted a couple of typos: "At it’s peak" should be its peak and later on "victims body" should be victim's body.

I wonder what the neighbours will make of Matthew now he's finally dying?

Tiger

tusker at 14:26 on 06 February 2009  Report this post
Thanks Tiger.

Neighbours being neighbours, won't care or notice, I think.

Jennifer

Forbes at 17:45 on 06 February 2009  Report this post
Oooh nasty! And skilful horror from all sides Jennifer.

Cheers

Avis

Jumbo at 23:57 on 06 February 2009  Report this post
Ah, nasty.

But just when it was getting interesting - it stopped!

Are there a couple of words missing in Down in the cellar, he buried his victims bodies in dank, evil smelling earth that writhed fat, pink worms.

Should it be '...smelling earth in which there writhed fat, pink worms.' Or something.

Great story, more please.

john



tusker at 08:34 on 07 February 2009  Report this post
Thanks Avis. Love being nasty.

Thanks too, John. Will correct.

Jennifer

crowspark at 22:36 on 07 February 2009  Report this post
A lovely chiller this one Jennifer. John picked up the typo.
Loved
After the victim had relaxed in a hot, fragrant bath, been fed and had drunk the wine, they were shown to a bedroom. Overcome with inexplicable weariness, they tumbled onto a four poster bed, instantly falling into a drug induced sleep that numbed both their minds and bodies.

Sounds like a fair exchange to me
Thanks for the read.

Cholero at 08:57 on 08 February 2009  Report this post
Jennifer

The chest of hearts, brilliant.

Slicing into the artery, nicely pictured.

reward of an ample meal and a fine bottle of Chablis.
not a cheap date, this ghoul...

Nice idea. I wondered if at the end the ghoul could find out about the disease in some way, rather than just being struck by the knowledge - would make for a stronger and more natural reveal/surprise at the end...

Nice writing - I felt like I'd spent the night somewhere really quite creepy!

Pete


tusker at 09:23 on 08 February 2009  Report this post
Thanks Pete and Bill. Glad you liked it.

Jennifer


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