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Flesh

by denthepen 

Posted: 14 April 2003
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Flesh is
like dough. Knead it.
Let it yield beneath your
fingers. Brand it with your palm. Leave
a scar.






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Rai15 at 13:04 on 18 April 2003  Report this post
denthepen,
I think that your poem is extremely effective by the length of it in relation to its message. Although I generally write longer poetry, this poem seems to draw me to it. As absurd as that may sound, I can't word it any better than that. The poem is made very powerful by the short sentances and hard-hitting message behind them. Congratulations, its excellent.
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Alison at 21:26 on 14 April 2005  Report this post
This poem seems very violent to me, very threatening - but in a good, effective way! The short sentences are really effective. And it makes me wonder, whose flesh?

I don't really know anything about poetry, but I think it's brilliant.

Alison.
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