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Out with the old

by Iagoybardd 

Posted: 22 November 2008
Word Count: 62
Summary: In this deep mid-winter, the sack is going to more than poor old Santa!
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Secret Santa’s slashed his gifts
His belt and buckles tightened
And all around a joyless sound
His Ho-Ho-Ho seems frightened.
So it’s out with the old
And out with the new
And shameless and boldly
They'll stick with a few
And everyone wonders
– Aren’t you wondering as well –
If these cuts will bring peace
In our work, or be hell?






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BaMc at 11:47 on 22 November 2008  Report this post
Timely - such dark thoughts will be concerning many theses days.
Taut and cohesive - thought second and fourth lines worked especially well.
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joanie at 12:41 on 22 November 2008  Report this post
Great, James! I liked it. Funny and unsettling at the same time. I liked the rhymes. It's an excellent response!
joanie
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V`yonne at 14:11 on 22 November 2008  Report this post
I think you know the address? Send it today. Excfe4llent and very topical
Read the WriteWords interview with Oonah Joslin (V`yonne)
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tractor at 16:38 on 22 November 2008  Report this post
Liked this. A frightened Ho-Ho-Ho sums things up well.

Cheers

Mark
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DJC at 17:32 on 22 November 2008  Report this post
Very sinister, James - like it!
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Nella at 20:03 on 22 November 2008  Report this post
I agree - those first four lines sum it up. Well done.
Robin
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Iagoybardd at 00:04 on 23 November 2008  Report this post
Thank you all for the kind words. It's amazing how easy it is to focus, when somebody tells you your job is on the line!

James
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