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Not Quite a Coven
Posted: 07 November 2008 Word Count: 158 Summary: My entry for Drip/Tap challenge
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The teenager turned into a witch overnight. And I had created her - I don’t know how, but it was down to me that this creature has been released on the world. And it was down to me to make sure she doesn’t harm anyone, including herself. Easier said than done, I say.
Like a leaking tap, my energy drips away. Every “No” has a screeching response. Every “Can you…?” is cursed. Every “Please…” met with silence. Someone once told me to count to ten. But numbers mean nothing when the red mist of anger clouds your vision. When your heart beats a dent in your chest, your voice becomes a shrill wail, your feet hurt from stomping and banging, and your head thumps like the doors you slam.
I feed her, clothe her and keep her warm while she casts spells in her hovel of a room.
Now I am the wicked one and she the enchantress.
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crowspark at 23:08 on 07 November 2008
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Ah Rosie, I bless the fact I had boys!
But I did feel for the poor mother, a Pandora waiting for healing hope's emergence.
Lovely flash.
Bill
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rosiedlm at 23:30 on 07 November 2008
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Yes Bill, boys are different and, judging by my son's behaviour, much more gentle.
Thanks for reading,
Rosie
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Forbes at 23:48 on 07 November 2008
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Coo Rosie, can I have one (a boy) like that! Mine's the male counter part of La Diva up there! Not quite Kevin, but on occasion - getting there.
Heart felt, it felt!
Cheers
Avis
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V`yonne at 23:56 on 07 November 2008
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That's why the wee girl at the end of my story is right never to change her mind
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tusker at 05:11 on 08 November 2008
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Loved it Rosie, brings back memories of mine. Thank goodness they grow up.
Jennifer
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Elbowsnitch at 08:05 on 08 November 2008
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All-out teenage hell - a vivid picture, Rosie! Love the rapid shifts in persona and role. You could develop this even further.
Frances
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tiger_bright at 10:45 on 08 November 2008
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Yikes, Rosie, I have a daughter and this scared the heck out of me! She's only seven but all this in store..!
When your heart beats a dent in your chest, your voice becomes a shrill wail, your feet hurt from stomping and banging, and your head thumps like the doors you slam. |
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Loved those sounds and the shape of the sentences.
Tiger
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rosiedlm at 21:34 on 09 November 2008
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Thanks everyone for reading and commenting. As you can see from the comment above, I accidentally left this on my screen and my daughter read this piece! She took it well, though, laughed it off and is still talking to me. Phew!
Best,
Rosie
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