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True Colours

by  tusker  ( 6792 )

Posted: 23 October 2008
Word Count: 231
Summary: Flash 1 and 2 challenge


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They say true colours match moods, reflect personalities.
Usually, your aura is blue, edged with red that arches above your head like a rainbow.

They say red is the first colour you lose at twilight. And tonight, as that red dims and those pale blues fade, I ask myself am I losing you?

You've always said my aura is white. White reveals truth and honesty, doesn't it?

Today, I'm wearing grey and my white aura, you tell me, with sadness in your voice, is rimmed in black; a black that conceals my true thoughts from you.

You ask me to put on that pretty pink dress. I note you're wearing a pale orange tie. And, as I gaze at the tie, I wonder if you're trying to recapture your desire; a powerful desire you once had for me.

So I change into my pink dress. You replace your tie with a purple one. And I think, as you walk out of the room, if maybe you're tyring to confuse me.

And, as we leave for dinner, a bouquet of daffodils in their glass vase catches my eye; spring flowers that should engender feelings of joy and happiness inside me.

Now, at the sight of those yellow trumpets, I suspect your recent gift is a token of your deceit; a deceit that, after all this time, you're about to reveal to me.




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Posted by :  Elbowsnitch at 12:20 on 23 October 2008
Like this, Jennifer - especially the orange tie and the pink dress, and him changing the tie to a purple one - which I think he shouldn't have! Never trust a man with a red aura around his head.

3rd-to-last para - tyring

Pretty work!

Frances
Posted by :  tusker at 11:02 on 24 October 2008
Glad you liked it, Frances.

All colours, as you know, have they're own meanings. Auras do too.

Jennifer
Posted by :  Prospero at 13:38 on 24 October 2008
Very nice Jennifer. Understated, but effective. I enjoyed it very much.

Best

Prosp
Posted by :  tusker at 14:27 on 24 October 2008
Thanks, Oonah. Understatement is my middle name.

Jennifer
Posted by :  V`yonne at 16:45 on 24 October 2008
Jennifer, I know Prosp and I look similar - it's the beard, I think I loved the way you linked all the colours to a certain meaning.
Posted by :  Bunbry at 18:53 on 24 October 2008
I like this Jennifer. I'm humming 'Take That Look of Your Face' as there is a hint of that in this. There was the line "No I didn't dig deep, I did not want to know" which is one of the saddest lines ever.

Nick
Posted by :  rosiedlm at 22:25 on 24 October 2008
Very good Jennifer. Clever the way you wove in alot of colours into the writing. And beware a man wearing a colourful tie!

Thanks,
Rosie
Posted by :  Jordan789 at 22:59 on 24 October 2008
The number of colors connected to sentiments turns me off from this story. It might be my personal dislike for the word "aura" and all of its connotations.
Posted by :  tusker at 09:07 on 25 October 2008
Thanks Prosp.
I'm at it again, answering to the wrong comment.Must polish up my colours they're looking a bit grey.

Glad you liked it.

Jennifer
Posted by :  tusker at 09:09 on 25 October 2008
Thanks Nick,

That's quite true about a lot of things, don't dig deep but, at some point, it rises up and smacks you in the face.

Jennifer
Posted by :  tusker at 09:11 on 25 October 2008
Thanks, Rosie.

My man hates ties. I buy them. He wears them only for special occasions. Thank goodness there aren't many of those.

Jennifer
Posted by :  tusker at 09:19 on 25 October 2008
That's OK Jordan.
Personally, my favourite colour, clothes wise, is black.

Auras, I associate with rainbows whether they are connected with the weather or the kind that are perceptible by a few.

Jennifer
Posted by :  Forbes at 22:40 on 25 October 2008
Nice one Jennifer, I found tracking all the colours a little... involved - y'know? But the conclusion she draws is so sad.

Well done.

Avis
Posted by :  crowspark at 00:01 on 26 October 2008
Nicely done, Jennifer.
An imaginative use of the prompts.
Thanks for the read.
Posted by :  tusker at 08:14 on 26 October 2008
Thanks Avis. I understand. Yes, most conclusions are, I'm afraid.

Jennifer
Posted by :  tusker at 08:16 on 26 October 2008
Thanks Bill. Writing flashes, for me, gets harder every week but I'm an enthusiast as far as colour meanings; any meaning behind what seems the ordinary.

Jennifer
Posted by :  crowspark at 08:57 on 26 October 2008
gets harder every week

Well you are doing it brilliantly and I wouldn't have known if you hadn't said.


Posted by :  choille at 15:44 on 26 October 2008
Hi Jennifer - This is fun & very colourful.

Once met a couple of woman who had glass bottles filled with different coloured water in each. They asked me to pick one, but I refrained as I didn't want them to 'read me.'

If a man asked me to wear pink I'd leave - mind you if he wore an orange tie I wouldn't allow him in in the first place.

I think this is really good.
All the best
Caroline.


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