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Dream lover

by roovacrag 

Posted: 27 October 2003
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My Knight in shining armour.
My dragon slayer.
Let me down my vibrant hair,
for you to scale.

Climb up to my tower.
hold me close to you.
Our lips touch,
bodies entwine,as i make love to you.

The passion overides the storm,
apex to the top.
A torried kind of love affair,
but in the aftermath.

I open my eyes and i see,
my Knight is no more.
Instead my night a wonderous one.
Has now turned to dawn.

My dream lover gone.






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Fearless at 13:34 on 27 October 2003  Report this post
Al

Like the bodice-ripping calorie-packed chocolate action from the medievil milk tray man.

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roovacrag at 13:41 on 27 October 2003  Report this post
OOOOOO he shot through the window and gave me migraine.xx
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Fearless at 14:01 on 27 October 2003  Report this post
Al

That must have been a creamy chocolate

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roovacrag at 14:55 on 27 October 2003  Report this post
Don't get personal. i like milk chocolate man, who is a pain in the a...xxxxx
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poemsgalore at 18:36 on 27 October 2003  Report this post
One suggestion - in between chocolate bars - maybe the first verse should read
'Let me down my vibrant hair,
for you to scale'

then you're not repeating the same word in succession. Otherwise, lovely stuff - like chocolate.
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The Walrus at 21:32 on 27 October 2003  Report this post
Dreams/reality, can one really distinguish?

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roovacrag at 08:17 on 28 October 2003  Report this post
Thanx poemsgalore i changed it is a better line xx
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Bobo at 10:16 on 28 October 2003  Report this post
Dear Roov -

Love the imagery of this - the princess-in-the-tower, the salvation offered by the valiant knight, the waking-up to reality...would make a great Flake advert!

BoBo
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