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Impossible things
Posted: 06 October 2008
Word Count: 52
Summary: For the Flash Poetry challenge
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To stand dry-eyed
when jazz bands
swagger by
To keep your mouth closed
when the group plays
‘Walk on by’
To sit straight-faced
while gulls and eagles
swirl into the sky
To carry on as normal
when a loved one
says good-bye
To watch in silence
while your children
live a lie.
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 V`yonne at 23:08 on 06 October 2008
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Oh that last one is a corker, Joanie! Watching anyone live a lie it's hard to bite your tongue but a child...Impossible indeed. Very good.
(I don't like Jazz but I'll take your word on that one.) 
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 joanie at 23:16 on 06 October 2008
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Gosh, Oonah - that was fast! Originally I had 'brass bands pass by' but the rhythm wasn't right somehow. I preferred 'swagger', which only works with jazz bands. I always fill up when I watch a brass band parade. Perhaps I'll re-think!
Thanks for the challenge and for responding so quickly!!
joanie
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 Nella at 08:20 on 07 October 2008
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Yeah, that ending really hits you. Wow, Joanie, good poem! I really like it.
Robin
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MarlaD at 11:43 on 09 October 2008
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Very profound ending Joanie! Im not getting the gulls & eagles thing..I guess you had to be there, but great poem all the same x
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DJC at 17:15 on 09 October 2008
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Joanie - I have to say that I don't usually like poems with the rhyme at the end of each stanza, but in this case it works. I think it is the final stanza which draws the images of the other stanza together and leave you with a final thought.
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Haadi at 06:02 on 10 October 2008
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You gave me the shivers after a whirlwind quick read (sorry not much time to muse and comment) but you hit the right note that's for sure!
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joanie at 16:17 on 10 October 2008
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Thanks to you all. MarlaD, I meant that when I see birds swooping so majestically and effortlessly, I can't help smiling or gasping aloud or commenting about the magnificence of it all.
Thanks for reading and responding!
joanie
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 Elsie at 21:47 on 11 October 2008
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Well done Joanie,makes me think of that terribly famous one whose name escapes me...
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joanie at 01:09 on 12 October 2008
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Hi Elsie! Glad you could pop in to WW - thanks for reading and commenting. Let me know when your deli is going to be on TV! - November, was it?
joanie
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