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Boxing Day

by tusker

Posted: 26 June 2008
Word Count: 89
Summary: Flash 2 challenge: the other side of the character written for flash 1.

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113 days to go before they let him out.
113 days to go before she starts concealing her bruises.
113 days to go before her kids begin crying under their duvets.
113 days to go before she stops wearing make-up.
113 days to go before he sets fire to toys, her clothes and school books.
28 weeks and 1 day to go before he walks in the door drunk and cursing.

But for now, on this Boxing Day night, she's thankful that her kids have enjoyed a peaceful Christmas.

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Nella at 17:28 on 26 June 2008 Report this post

This is powerful, Jennifer. Great force. And then the little bit of hope at the end. Well done!
Robin

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Prospero at 17:53 on 26 June 2008 Report this post

Wow! Then wow some more.

For sheer emotional impact that is astonishing.

Best

John

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tusker at 18:55 on 26 June 2008 Report this post

Well thank you both, Robin and John. It was written very quickly but, admittedly, with emotion.

Jennifer

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Jubbly at 20:44 on 26 June 2008 Report this post

This really gave me goosebumps Jennifer, so terribly sad. Very well written.

J

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V`yonne at 20:57 on 26 June 2008 Report this post

Jennifer, this is as near as damn a poem you know. All you would do is cut everything unnecessary out. I said you were a poet

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Actually Jennifer it makes me feel quite sick when I read it. It's the way you change the days into weeks I think. It so perfectly shows how it is not just the abuse but the anticipation of it that ruins lives.

Why don't you try Conclave with this or Boston Lit?

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tusker at 14:34 on 27 June 2008 Report this post

Thanks, Oonah. Glad you like it. Glad too you think it' s poetical.

Jennifer

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V`yonne at 14:44 on 27 June 2008 Report this post

I think you' ll like mine too Jen

You' ll go AW! Bet you will!

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Forbes at 00:53 on 28 June 2008 Report this post

Startling in it' s brevity. It packs a real punch. Well done Jennifer.

Cheers

Avis