Ken, I promise I will read and comment in the next few days, I' ve been off line lately and a bit snowed under.

J

Hi Ken,so sorry I took so long to get to you. I found this compelling reading, and very filmic too. There's such a lot of wonderful mind games going on it's really a delight to try and work out who is telling the truth and who isn't. I would've liked to see a bit more of Amy at the beginning, maybe as a sort of symbol of what was to come, but just a thought. Also there is a moment when Fletcher tells Amy how lonely he is and for reason that jarred. I think it was just too telling, might be being really picky here but Henderson is obviously the lonely one and Fletcher is caught in a trap so it just didn't sit right. Again feel free to ignore. Is it a one act piece? What do you plan to do with it? I did really like it, it was very evocative and I do enjoy your style. The reader and hopefuly punter tends to get hooked very quickly then has to hold on tight for the rest of the ride. All the best with this Ken and do keep me posted.

J
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