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Window dressing
Posted: 17 June 2008
Word Count: 24
Summary: Nothing in particular...
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Above the curtains
the pelmet drapes dutifully
to cover the hooks
but soon she'll find out
that smooth velour can't compensate
for ragged lifestyles.
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 Elsie at 12:32 on 18 June 2008
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Hello - this is really nice - I think it deserves a less punny title, as it' s quite profound actually.
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 joanie at 13:02 on 18 June 2008
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Thanks, Elsie. You' re right about the title of course! I' ll re-think.
joanie
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Title now changed but I'm not convinced it's right yet. For those who didn't see the original title it was 'Drapes of wrath'.
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 V`yonne at 14:22 on 18 June 2008
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It' s really very philosophical. How about Window Dressing... - the tricks we like to use to hide the truth - often from ourselves 
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V`yonne at 17:28 on 18 June 2008
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Glad you liked it. Many' s the day I feel like putting on the curtains - they fit better 
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 Tina at 17:15 on 19 June 2008
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Neat poem Joanie as ever an example of less is more AND I think the title is good too - sufficiently ambiguous and with double meanings.Velour - there a word to conjour a whole host of period stuff!!!
Thanks
Tina
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joanie at 21:44 on 19 June 2008
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Thanks, Tina. I do appreciate it. Thanks to Oonah for the title!!
joanie
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 James Graham at 21:24 on 20 June 2008
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Good change of title. As Elsie said, this is quite profound, e.g. it isn' t ' ragged lives' but ' ragged lifestyles' . Lifestyle isn' t a synonym for life, implying an outer life rather than an inner life, also a life that' s on show for others to hopefully admire.
' Dutifully' is good. ' Hooks' seems to have connotations beyond the literal. 'Soon she'll find out' is intriguing, suggesting a young newlywed with 'lifestyle' pitfalls ahead of her. The poem has implications just half-hidden under the surface. Much in little, as always.
James.
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joanie at 22:10 on 20 June 2008
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Thanks, James, for all your observations. You have the knack of telling me why I used a particular word or phrase when I had no idea why myself! However, lifestyles was chosen over lives deliberately for exactly the reason you outline.
You know, I' m not quite sure myself how exactly she' ll find out that' s quite exciting!
Thank you, sincerely.
joanie
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Ticonderoga at 15:45 on 04 July 2008
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Elliptical, elusive, allusive, suggestive................and DEEP, man.
Write on!
Mike
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