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Window dressing

by joanie 

Posted: 17 June 2008
Word Count: 24
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Above the curtains
the pelmet drapes dutifully
to cover the hooks

but soon she'll find out
that smooth velour can't compensate
for ragged lifestyles.

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Elsie at 12:32 on 18 June 2008  Report this post
Hello - this is really nice - I think it deserves a less punny title, as it' s quite profound actually.

joanie at 13:02 on 18 June 2008  Report this post
Thanks, Elsie. You' re right about the title of course! I' ll re-think.



Title now changed but I'm not convinced it's right yet. For those who didn't see the original title it was 'Drapes of wrath'.

V`yonne at 14:22 on 18 June 2008  Report this post
It' s really very philosophical. How about Window Dressing... - the tricks we like to use to hide the truth - often from ourselves

joanie at 15:54 on 18 June 2008  Report this post
Thanks Oonah. That' s a good idea.


V`yonne at 17:28 on 18 June 2008  Report this post
Glad you liked it. Many' s the day I feel like putting on the curtains - they fit better

Tina at 17:15 on 19 June 2008  Report this post
Neat poem Joanie as ever an example of less is more AND I think the title is good too - sufficiently ambiguous and with double meanings.Velour - there a word to conjour a whole host of period stuff!!!

joanie at 21:44 on 19 June 2008  Report this post
Thanks, Tina. I do appreciate it. Thanks to Oonah for the title!!


James Graham at 21:24 on 20 June 2008  Report this post
Good change of title. As Elsie said, this is quite profound, e.g. it isn' t ' ragged lives' but ' ragged lifestyles' . Lifestyle isn' t a synonym for life, implying an outer life rather than an inner life, also a life that' s on show for others to hopefully admire.

' Dutifully' is good. ' Hooks' seems to have connotations beyond the literal. 'Soon she'll find out' is intriguing, suggesting a young newlywed with 'lifestyle' pitfalls ahead of her. The poem has implications just half-hidden under the surface. Much in little, as always.


joanie at 22:10 on 20 June 2008  Report this post
Thanks, James, for all your observations. You have the knack of telling me why I used a particular word or phrase when I had no idea why myself! However, lifestyles was chosen over lives deliberately for exactly the reason you outline.

You know, I' m not quite sure myself how exactly she' ll find out that' s quite exciting!

Thank you, sincerely.


Ticonderoga at 15:45 on 04 July 2008  Report this post
Elliptical, elusive, allusive, suggestive................and DEEP, man.

Write on!


joanie at 16:42 on 04 July 2008  Report this post
Thanks, Mike!


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