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by hailfabio 

Posted: 16 June 2008
Word Count: 24
Summary: awwwwwwww............

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The touches,
like earthquakes across my skin.
I begin
to give in
to the slow pulses
of her scent
and descend into her.

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Ticonderoga at 15:38 on 04 July 2008  Report this post
h - this is very lovely but, if I may, two small spelling points: ' emanating' and, given the structure of the phrase which makes up the second part of the poem, shouldn' t it be ' descend' ?
Otherwise, a fine, tender poem.



hailfabio at 15:06 on 15 July 2008  Report this post
Thanks for the useful feedback as usual mike, much appreciated.


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