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First Night

by Ling Ling 

Posted: 19 October 2003
Word Count: 96

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Oh Angel of the night,
Come take me to your heart.
For what darkness could my soul consume,
Without breath, without sound,
Unfounded by the fire in the blood
that our hearts cannot confine alone
to this place, this moment,
Where we two become one.

Though time has kept us apart,
Slowly it draws us together.
Like the gentle sands, we flow into a chasm,
Longing for the touch of silky skin,
You consume my very soul,
As I know what my heart really feels,
You pull me into your embrace
and make me your woman.

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Fearless at 13:21 on 19 October 2003  Report this post
That's a great poem Ling-Ling...



You've got a strong influence, like Octavio Paz.

Couple of typos:

1st stanza, 3rd line 'consume', rather than 'comsume'

2nd stanza, 1st line: 'apart' rather than 'appart'

Ellenna at 13:32 on 19 October 2003  Report this post
Very beautiful and intimate .. from the heart Ling Ling..

Ellie :)

roovacrag at 14:18 on 19 October 2003  Report this post
beautiful poem. i enjoyed reading it.xx

Ling Ling at 15:32 on 19 October 2003  Report this post
I wrote this over a fine Merlot last night. Its funny what inspires us to write sometimes. Thank you all for your kind comments.

Fearless at 16:47 on 19 October 2003  Report this post
Whoever this is for, would have fallen off his chair. It's powerful stuff - keep on writing, Octavio Paz II Jr (Mrs)


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