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An elegant sufficiency

by joanie 

Posted: 12 May 2008
Word Count: 26
Summary: A propos of nothing at all! Honestly!
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Lunch
seemed like a
tempting path
to an afternoon of
drunk-drowsy laziness

until
she spotted
the units.
One point seven for a
small glass. Binge. Cringe






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Zettel at 22:38 on 14 May 2008  Report this post
Go for it Joannie - worry kills more people than booze any day.

Anyway aren't the daily/weekly units a target not a limit?

Tongue in cheek.

A single idea nicely captured.

Regards

Z
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joanie at 09:46 on 15 May 2008  Report this post
Thanks Z! I'll take your advice!

joanie
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James Graham at 15:57 on 15 May 2008  Report this post
Hi Joanie. Enjoyed this - especially the two final bombshell words. The whole thing is like a compressed anecdote, something someone might tell in conversation, at much (even too much) greater length. But your characteristic concise verse crystallises it.

James.
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joanie at 17:56 on 15 May 2008  Report this post
Thanks, James. Much appreciated, as always!

joanie
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DeepBlueGypsy at 16:39 on 22 May 2008  Report this post
Being American, it took me a mere moment to get the understanding of some of the words, but once I did, I laughed outloud! I refuse to eat or drink at a place that lets me know the caloric damage I am doing. Loved this! Divi
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Ticonderoga at 14:57 on 23 May 2008  Report this post
Distilled to perfection. Full bodied with a very fine nose. And funny!

Best,

Mike
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joanie at 18:48 on 23 May 2008  Report this post
Divi, I'm glad you could relate to it eventually! Never look at the calories!

Thanks

joanie
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joanie at 18:49 on 23 May 2008  Report this post
Mike, I appreciate your wonderfully well-thought-out and insightful response, as always!

joanie
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