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Calming

by joanie 

Posted: 09 May 2008
Word Count: 21
Summary: I live a mile from the sea and take it for granted!
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Swishing
draining
forwards
sucking
draining
backwards
inwards
outwards
shlurping
waves wash
pebbles pant
sand slurps
lives loosen
cares cool
problems pale







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V`yonne at 21:53 on 09 May 2008  Report this post
A wonderful sense of ebb and flow in the rhythm, Joanie and the slowing of it towards the end as cares drain away... Excellent! I could feel myself relaxing as it slowed in pace. The alliteration too plays well to heighten the effect. Good work!
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Elsie at 00:24 on 10 May 2008  Report this post
Hi Joanie
Wonderful - and how interesting you have easy access to the sea. When I saw the task I did tink - blimey - it's so long since I've seen the sea - but I still felt aware of the cslming/righting effect it can have. Simple and distilled, as ever.
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Nella at 08:33 on 11 May 2008  Report this post
Wonderful, Joanie! Totally agree with what Oonah and Elsie say. It gets better every time I read it.
Robin
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joanie at 23:30 on 11 May 2008  Report this post
Oonah, Elsie, Robin..... thank you very much! I'm glad it worked.

joanie
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