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Angel

by tusker 

Posted: 06 May 2008
Word Count: 237
Summary: Week 106 challenge.


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A marble angel stands at the head of Arthur Fletcher's grave. In her hands, she raises a bird bath to the heavens while, close by, a bulldozer flattens the council run cemetery.

Amid the noise of destruction, men wearing hard hats throw debris into industrial skips. Unseen, the angel grows taller and taller.

Beneath the angel's feet, Arthur Fletcher stirs, his skeleton shifting with new growth that has slept inside his rotting flesh for over twenty odd years.

Green slime pulsates. Amoeba like creatures hatch out. Hundreds of corpses, agitated by external activity, awake and writhe in many graves as yet untouched by demolition.

Rapidly, these creatures grow. Tentacles take shape. Heads like rugby balls enlarge. Hungry mouths yawn into cavernous pits and when the bulldozer draws close, the angel meets the startled gaze of its driver.

Suddenly, the bird bath smashes through the wind screen. Decapitated, the driver's head falls from the cab into the mouth of the first emerging Grunchling. Then the cemetery erupts and thousands of his species slither out from their dark nesting places.

Frantic, slithering on green slime, work men trying to escape, are sucked up by those immense, blubbery mouths and fresh white bones spew out on top of older, greyer ones.

Minutes later, their eating frenzy ends and the Grunchlings move en masse towards the town where, outside the Council Chambers, demonstrators hold up placards, chanting, 'Save our local cemetery.






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Nella at 15:59 on 06 May 2008  Report this post
Jennifer!! That's gruesome, hilariously so!!
Great story!
You just forgot a quotation mark at the end. And should it be "Council-run" with a hyphen?
Robin

tusker at 16:08 on 06 May 2008  Report this post
Thanks Robin. Glad you found it amusing. Thanks for the hyphen.

Jennifer

Forbes at 17:55 on 06 May 2008  Report this post
Jennifer you are sick! And I mean that in a kind and caring way!! This was funny and absolutely disgusting.

Reminded me of a Ray Bradbury story (I think) Well done keeping your lunch down while you wrote it. Sending it to Microhorror?

Cheers

Avis

tusker at 18:32 on 06 May 2008  Report this post
Thanks Avis. Might send to them. The monsters, in my mind, resemble those monsters on packets of Monster Munch crispy thingies that kids enjoy. I think that's what they were called. Sick? Moi? No. Just weird.

Jennifer

Nella at 08:57 on 07 May 2008  Report this post
Do send it to Microhorror, Jennifer. What I really liked is the way you ended with the demonstrators. That made the whole story really funny.
Robin

tusker at 09:07 on 07 May 2008  Report this post
Thanks again, Robin. I'll do that.

Jennifer

novodantis at 23:54 on 07 May 2008  Report this post
Hi Jennifer,

Liked it very much! Funny, grotesque and savage, and overall highly readable =)

~Alexander

tusker at 13:57 on 08 May 2008  Report this post
Thanks Alexander.

tiger_bright at 09:25 on 09 May 2008  Report this post
Hi, Jennifer. Excellent B movie horror flash! I loved all the slime and the angel presiding over it all, and the demo at the end. One tiny nit, I'd do away with the first one in each of these sentences:

Suddenly, the bird bath smashes through the wind screen. Decapitated, the driver's head falls from the cab into the mouth of the first emerging Grunchling

I think it would be punchier like this:
The bird bath smashes through the wind screen. The driver's head falls from the cab into the mouth of the first emerging Grunchling

But that's just my opinion. It's terrific as it stands.

Tiger

tusker at 13:13 on 09 May 2008  Report this post
Thanks Tiger. Take your point.

Jennifer

rosiedlm at 14:28 on 09 May 2008  Report this post
Very funny Jennifer. Love the idea of the monsters/zombies picketing the council. Excellent.

Best,
Rosie


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