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sword

by bluesky3d 

Posted: 14 October 2003
Word Count: 44
Summary: the fantasy - 'the Quest' has some visual poems - this was one that wasn't included


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...........................................Sword
.............................................of
............................................Love

.................................. :::::::::::::::::::::::::
........................................CARPE DIEM
.......................................fight the fear
..........................................dreams
.......................................disappear.. a
.......................................friend to you
.......................................and.......you
.......................................no...... more
.......................................a...... friend
.......................................to me... steel
.......................................cuts..... deep
...................................... to.... the hilt
.......................................to..the heart
.......................................yet..no blood
.......................................is....... spilt
........................................the.....edge
.........................................so....keen
..........................................and how
...........................................sharp
............................................the
............................................tip
.............................................!






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The Walrus at 18:39 on 14 October 2003  Report this post
R-E-S-P-E-C-T.

Personally, I prefer the more conventional ending, more in keeping stylistically with the rest of the poem. Also, the echoing of 'so' drives the point home as it were.

The Walrus
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bluesky3d at 20:33 on 14 October 2003  Report this post
........................................CARPE DIEM
.......................................fight the fear
..........................................dreams
.......................................disappear.. a
.......................................friend to you
.......................................and.......you
.......................................no...... more
.......................................a...... friend
.......................................to me... steel
.......................................cuts..... deep
...................................... to.... the hilt
.......................................to..the heart
.......................................yet..no blood
.......................................is....... spilt
........................................the......edge
.........................................so.....keen
..........................................the.. tip
............................................so..sh
.............................................arp
..............................................!

yes, i do too, but you can see why I didn't upload it - cos it don't look the same graphically - doh! well not on WW text anyway

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........................................the......edge
.........................................so.....keen
..........................................the.. tip
............................................so..sh
..............................................ar
..............................................p
..............................................!


that probably looks a tad better on here - dunno
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The Walrus at 21:19 on 14 October 2003  Report this post
...so sharp
...is the
.....tip
......!

For what it's worth!

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