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Sunday, 8.50pm
Posted: 09 March 2008
Word Count: 42
Summary: Says it all, really!
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Tantalisingly close
yet far enough away
to forget
looms the
slight
headache
which could easily be
ignored in the scheme of
things if she
didn't
feel
like shit
anyway. But she'll go
into work where perhaps
tomorrow
will be
better
than yesterday.
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 Tina at 09:35 on 13 March 2008
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Oh Joanie how well I know this one! There are few jobs where people regularly go onto work when they are ill - I guess that they are all in the public services too! You have really captured the will I wont I debate that goes on in ones head and the answer is always yes I will because of the guilt trip if you dont!!
Well done this is great - I think this one should go on a tube train - perhaps you should sent it to poems onthe underground?? I will look for a lonk for you.
Tina
xx
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 V`yonne at 10:35 on 13 March 2008
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Great Joanie.
I put a link to a competition up and I hope some of you will sub. Of course I will not know who wrote what but I am thinking of deactivating from poetry for a while just to make sure I don't see something workshopped. I would have to disqualify it if I did...hadn't thought of this til now.
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 joanie at 10:51 on 13 March 2008
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Thanks, Tina. That's a good idea; I'll look for a link too! I hadn't thought about that before. Glad you can relate to this.
V'yonne, I've seen the link to your competition - I'll have a think about it!
joanie
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 James Graham at 21:45 on 13 March 2008
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Joanie, so often you manage to capture a moment in ordinary life, one that practically anyone would recognise and share the feelings associated with it. I remember (though the memory is fading at last) having that kind of Sunday night moment even during the school summer holidays. It might be the last weekend in July, and tomorrow would be as free as today, but the mood seemed to be there just the same - even accompanied by symptoms of some ill-defined ailment.
You grab hold of those moments and moods and present them with good humour. I’m trying to work out why your space between ‘shit’ and ‘anyway’ is so effective and so amusing. I can’t explain it, but the space made me laugh.
James.
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joanie at 22:29 on 13 March 2008
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James, I am so glad that you can relate to this, but..... even more .. I made you laugh! That is just wonderful!! Thank you.
joanie
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V`yonne at 00:33 on 14 March 2008
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I agree about that space. I think it's because it's like a deep sigh - a big effort. Also it suggests athat even if she wasn't ill she tends to feel like that and we sympathise - just not wanting to get up...
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joanie at 14:36 on 15 March 2008
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Thanks Tina. I've looked at the 'archive' of poems published, and the poets I saw are all ... well ... dead! There doesn't seem to be a way of submitting something; presumably The Poetry Society etc. suggests poems/poets.
It has really got me thinking, though!! I rarely travel on the undergound, although now my son is back in London, it could be more frequent. Are the poems as obvious as, for example, all those adverts which flash past while you are on the escalator?
Thanks again for the link and the suggestion!
joanie
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Tina at 17:09 on 16 March 2008
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Joanie
On the Isle of Wight all the bus stops have names and visitors are invited to write a poem for each bus stop - great idea egh??
T
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Ticonderoga at 14:46 on 20 March 2008
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Joanie -
sorry to be so late.....thought I'd commented on this...........agree entirely with James; it's a rare gift you have for this sort of thing.
Best,
Mike
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