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Thought

by pene 

Posted: 14 October 2003
Word Count: 66


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Just when I thought I was getting it together
I go and lose it again.
Just when I thought the control I had gained
I go and lose it again.
Just when I thought I knew what I thought
I lose the thought again.
Just when I thought there is gain with no pain,
when I thought life was just a game,
I thought wrong again.






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The Walrus at 17:52 on 14 October 2003  Report this post
Blimey, ain't that true! It's a slippery b*****. I recommend a heavy duty lasooe combined with industrial strength glue.

Love the poem.

The Walrus



Ellenna at 18:59 on 14 October 2003  Report this post
yup,.. ain't that just the way it goes... great stuff!

Ellie

Ioannou at 21:17 on 14 October 2003  Report this post
The inevitability of this and the tired way you repeat the lines, works well. Am I reading 'Just when I thought the control I had gained' this line wrong? I was wondering if it should be 'Just when I thought I had gained control.' ? Love, Maria.

peterxbrown at 23:49 on 14 October 2003  Report this post
Excellent pene!! I love the line which includes "...the control I had gained"...... as the slight word reversal suggests a synergy with the condition which is the essence of the poem's subject.

pene at 08:53 on 15 October 2003  Report this post
Thankyou all for your comments, the control I had gained was intentionally written that way (bipolar word play)
best wishes Pene

Account Closed at 20:29 on 17 October 2003  Report this post
Wonderfully cynical - and so true!

Anne B


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