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Abaci

by tusker 

Posted: 06 March 2008
Word Count: 317
Summary: Week 97 challenge


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After receiving a letter from his wife, Toxena, telling him how much she missed him and what she'd bought during his absence, Plutarch left Delphi in a hurry fearing the worst.

'My dearest,' Toxena greeted her husband on his flustered arrival, three weeks later.'Why are you home so soon?'

As usual, at the sight of her beauty, Plutarch's heart melted and she, taking him by the hand, lead him into their home of pink marble.

Settling her husband down on voluptuous silk cushions, Toxena called to the servants ordering them to serve up the best meal they could create.

Later, lulled by the delicious fare and heady wine made from red grapes growing in their own vineyard, Plutarch, looked across those volumes of cushions at his wife and noticed, for the first time, a heavy gold bracelet draped around her dainty wrist.

Instant suspicion and jealousy rose up. 'Who gave you that bracelet?' he demanded.

'No one, dear husband,' she replied coyly.

He frowned and went on to ask in a gentler tone, 'Then how did you obtain such expensvie jewellery?'

'I bought it from a merchant,' she said and standing up, swept an elegant arm about the room.'Look around you dearest, at the delights I've purchased these past eight months.'

Plutarch did as she asked and as his gaze went from lush tapestries spun with gold thread and statues cast in silver, the last juicy olive, hours before plucked from his own grove, threatened to erupt from his throat.

'When you're away,' Toxena explained with a girlish pout. 'I get bored and lonely. There's nothing for me to do, my dear husband.'

Wordlessly, Plutarch struggled to his feet and strode over to a heavy ivory chest and opening the lid, he took out his Abaci board and commenced to count the price of his revered position as priest, mathematician and philosopher at the academy in Delphi.






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Forbes at 15:34 on 06 March 2008  Report this post
Hi Jennifer

you got the tone of this just right. It read just like those old stories do. I liked the fact that he arrived after three weeks' travelling and she thinks he back so soon. They knew about travelling in those days!

small picks

Plutarch left Delphi in a hurry fearing the worst.
could do with a comma after hurry?

...made from red grapes growing in their own vineyard
if they were still growing, could you make wine from 'em?


That'll teach him to leave his wife bored!!

Made me laugh.

Cheers

Avis


tusker at 16:48 on 06 March 2008  Report this post
Hi Avis, desperation drove me to write this flash about maths as I'm a maths dunce so equations were out and my standard is up to long division also couldn't face the wrath of Oonah for not trying. Thanks for your kind comments.

V`yonne at 17:00 on 06 March 2008  Report this post
Loved the idea that his jobs were costing him money! It's a bit like those people who run a big car to get to work so they can afford to run a big car.

I think hurriedly would be even better.

the wrath of Oonah Madam??? I am genuinely hurt and bewildered - nay quite out of countenance...I'm going to have to have wine with me dinner now (several glasses) just to console myself and put your cruel observation into perspective.

tusker at 17:41 on 06 March 2008  Report this post
I'm on my third. Oops, now I'm told it'll raise my blood pressure. Never mind.

Forbes at 17:48 on 06 March 2008  Report this post
Ha Ha - because I can!!!

. It's ok, I'll tire of it soon!!

Avis

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You know they are starting to look a bit like the FIVE horsemen of the Apocalpse! Maybe I'll hit the wine!

Avis ;)

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Oh ho - they don't work on added comments then?

V`yonne at 21:00 on 06 March 2008  Report this post
That's because there are only 4! HahA! JINX

Forbes at 07:45 on 07 March 2008  Report this post
No - look count 'em - 5! Oh..you mean 4 Horsemen of the Apocalpse. Well If I'd said THAT, then I wouldn't be mathematically correct about the smileys - now would I? I took poetic licence - something we writers do now and again....

Avis (& the 5!!)

tusker at 14:01 on 07 March 2008  Report this post
Will you two behave yourselves? It's a serious
business adding up faces and not a competition.

V`yonne at 14:40 on 07 March 2008  Report this post
Behave ourselves? What can you mean? I counted at least ten faces I'm sure

Forbes at 16:07 on 07 March 2008  Report this post
Put the bottle down Oonah and step away from the glass!!

- I promise I WILL get tired of 'em!!

Avis

V`yonne at 17:23 on 07 March 2008  Report this post
[H]

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(H)

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How do you do that last one?

tusker at 19:11 on 07 March 2008  Report this post
That's enough. Go to bed, now!

rebecca at 21:02 on 07 March 2008  Report this post
So interesting and different.

It sounded so authentic: all the 'she swept an elegant arm' and 'toxena called to the servants ordering them etc'.

I don't know how you manage to think up such wide ranging characters, viewpoints and angles. (extra point for mentioning angles?)

Really great.

Rebecca

Forbes at 22:16 on 07 March 2008  Report this post


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is colon + lower case o

Avis

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Sorry Jennifer, I'm off to beddy-byes now. Night-night.



tusker at 05:20 on 08 March 2008  Report this post
Thanks Rebecca. Googled Abacus and came up with the two characters who were really man and wife. Never heard of them before. So, not so clever just crafty.

Jennifer

tiger_bright at 10:15 on 08 March 2008  Report this post
Great response to the challenge, Jennifer. I loved the sumptuous feel of the piece, and the way it turned around and bit poor old Plutarch.

Tiny typo here: "lead him into their home of pink marble" - should be "led him"?

Thanks for a fab read.

Tiger

V`yonne at 10:37 on 08 March 2008  Report this post
:O:Onah

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:o:o just trying out :) or is that drying out? :o

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doesn't work out :(

tusker at 14:25 on 08 March 2008  Report this post
Thanks Sarah. Do you know where Oonah has gone? She's coming through in a strange way.

Jennifer

ireneintheworld at 17:33 on 08 March 2008  Report this post
loved this jennifer. what a great response. poor old plutarch.

irene x

tusker at 19:09 on 08 March 2008  Report this post
Thanks Irene.


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