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Fishing
Posted: 27 February 2008 Word Count: 95 Summary: Flash 1 challenge: If it's recognisable, it's grown a new life since last week.
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Ten golden fish, their open mouths scooping up minute particles while the black cat, crouches on a white boulder, her motionless body blocking out sunlight.
Suddenly with claws extended, her green eyes narrowing, she plunges a paw beneath the surface scattering fish under a lily pad, sending ripples eddying outwards, dislodging water snails from their anchorage.
Now sunlight, cruelly blatant, shines down on the cat's golden prey writhing and flopping on concrete as its once gentle, scooping mouth gasps in slow suffocation.
And the black cat purrs in satisfaction, sinking her teeth into shimmering scales.
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V`yonne at 15:54 on 27 February 2008
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Wonderful Jennifer. That worked really well.
My entry for this challenge is below "www" which you have already commented on.
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Forbes at 18:14 on 27 February 2008
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Ah - cats WILL be cats! You were lucky she didn't present you with one, and turn all hurt when you wasted it - by not eating it!
Nice gentle prose, I saw the cat very clearly.
TFR
Avis
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tusker at 18:46 on 27 February 2008
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Thanks Oonah and Avis. Lost 3 lovely fish, last year. Forgot to put mesh on after cleaning pond.
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tusker at 15:04 on 28 February 2008
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Thanks Irene. Having always had 2 cats at a time, the last two were sisters, I love cats. Sophey, the last one, died last year aged 21 years. Now we've only got our old dog Rusty left, he's 20, deaf, blind but happy. No more pets in future, apart from the goldfish and our tortoise, Seamus who's about 60/70 years old.
Jennifer
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Prospero at 17:08 on 28 February 2008
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Lovely and lyrical, Jennifer. Beautifully captured and presented. Like the goldfish :)
Best
John
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rosiedlm at 21:15 on 01 March 2008
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...sinking her teeth into shimmering scales. |
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Lovely imagery and lovely flash, Jennifer.
Best,
Rosie
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