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Fishing

by tusker 

Posted: 27 February 2008
Word Count: 95
Summary: Flash 1 challenge: If it's recognisable, it's grown a new life since last week.


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Ten golden fish, their open mouths scooping up minute particles while the black cat, crouches on a white boulder, her motionless body blocking out sunlight.

Suddenly with claws extended, her green eyes narrowing, she plunges a paw beneath the surface scattering fish under a lily pad, sending ripples eddying outwards, dislodging water snails from their anchorage.

Now sunlight, cruelly blatant, shines down on the cat's golden prey writhing and flopping on concrete as its once gentle, scooping mouth gasps in slow suffocation.

And the black cat purrs in satisfaction, sinking her teeth into shimmering scales.






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V`yonne at 15:54 on 27 February 2008  Report this post
Wonderful Jennifer. That worked really well.

My entry for this challenge is below "www" which you have already commented on.

Forbes at 18:14 on 27 February 2008  Report this post
Ah - cats WILL be cats! You were lucky she didn't present you with one, and turn all hurt when you wasted it - by not eating it!

Nice gentle prose, I saw the cat very clearly.

TFR

Avis

tusker at 18:46 on 27 February 2008  Report this post
Thanks Oonah and Avis. Lost 3 lovely fish, last year. Forgot to put mesh on after cleaning pond.

ireneintheworld at 14:25 on 28 February 2008  Report this post
lovely piece jennifer. loved the cat.

irene x

tusker at 15:04 on 28 February 2008  Report this post
Thanks Irene. Having always had 2 cats at a time, the last two were sisters, I love cats. Sophey, the last one, died last year aged 21 years. Now we've only got our old dog Rusty left, he's 20, deaf, blind but happy. No more pets in future, apart from the goldfish and our tortoise, Seamus who's about 60/70 years old.

Jennifer

Prospero at 17:08 on 28 February 2008  Report this post
Lovely and lyrical, Jennifer. Beautifully captured and presented. Like the goldfish :)

Best

John

tusker at 18:48 on 28 February 2008  Report this post
Thanks John.

Jennifer

rosiedlm at 21:15 on 01 March 2008  Report this post
...sinking her teeth into shimmering scales.


Lovely imagery and lovely flash, Jennifer.
Best,
Rosie


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