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Palais Politics

by Mickey 

Posted: 06 February 2008
Word Count: 249
Summary: Game plan on the dance floor


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(TONY)
“Ere, ‘ow ‘bout those two over there?
Mind! – don’t let ‘em see you stare!
I’ll take the one wiv the short dark ‘air …
but I don’t fancy yours!”


(SUE)
“Those two blokes are lookin at us”

(LINDA)
“Glad I’m in me dress that flatters!”

(SUE)
“Is that all that really matters?”

(LINDA)
“Well, it keeps ‘em keen!”

(DAVE)
“It’s funny, Tone mate,
you should say that,
‘cos I fink the dark one’s too fat –
I prefer girls on the thin side”


(TONY)
“What about what’s on the inside.
I like girls to have a brain …”


(DAVE)
“Oh, don’t let’s start that crap again!
When they’re undressed, they’re all the same”


(TONY)
“You treat all girls like whores!
Should we offer ‘em a drink,
or just a dance – waddya fink?”


(DAVE)
“Well, Tone, if you want to pull,
try a Vodka and Red Bull”


(LINDA)
“Here they come, let’s bat our eyes,
then knock their egos down to size”


(SUE)
“Oh, don’t be cruel, the tall one’s nice –
he’s got such lovely twinkling eyes”


(DAVE)
“Ello ladies, my mate Tony
saw you standin’ on yer own. He
thought that we should come and ask
if you two girls would care to dance?”


(SUE)
“Hello Tony, my name’s Sue,
and, yes, I’d love to dance with you”


(DAVE)
“Right, wiv those two off together,
I won’t take no ‘Why’ or ‘Whether’
let’s hit the floor and cut some feather –
Waddya say?”


(LINDA)
“…Whatever”






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joanie at 23:55 on 06 February 2008  Report this post
Great performance piece, Mike! How can anyone read this without saying it aloud and going for the accents and the different voices??

Enjoyed - especially the last line (and the rhymes before it)!

joanie

James Graham at 19:33 on 07 February 2008  Report this post
I agree with Joanie - this would be a great performance piece. With four readers, maybe, or one very versatile reader? You've even managed some characterisation - the two girls are different, and so are the two guys. There's hope for Sue and Tony, but the chemistry between Dave and Linda is toxic. The ending is a cue for applause - I don't think I've ever seen the 'whatever' (or wha'ever) used to such effect.

James.

Mickey at 10:08 on 08 February 2008  Report this post
Joanie and James, Thank you for your comments. I don’t think there are differences in accent in the voices (they’re all south London) – more in the tone and attitude and yes, I was trying to make that comparison (a bit like Bob and Terry from ‘The Likely Lads’) I’m glad that the four separate characters have succeeded in showing their faces through the dialogue though. Tony and Sue are supposed to be the more sensitive of the foursome, whilst Dave is the cynical ‘chancer’ and Linda the cold-hearted, but coquettish, mercenary. I think Linda is disappointed with her friend for having fallen too easily for Tony’s twinkling eyes (she would have extracted a few free drinks from the boys first!). She is obviously resigned to the usual battle of wills that she always encounters (without realising the tension is of her own making) I remember just such palais politics when I was ‘on the pull’ in my youth, and it always seemed to me then that different characters had very different game plans. Thanks again for reading me.

Ambitions of Lisa at 18:11 on 15 February 2008  Report this post
This made me smile so much!
It did remind me of The Likely Lads and also Men Behaving Badly.
Really different and an enjoyable read.
Lisa


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