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This petty pace
Posted: 22 November 2007
Word Count: 24
Summary: It's been a long week..
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The back of her hand
drawn across a forehead
imperceptibly lined
with the problems of the day
falls lifeless
at the thought of another
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 V`yonne at 14:11 on 23 November 2007
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Joanie, Got a bit confused whether her forehead or hand was lined and lifeless. Both if she's anything like me!
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 joanie at 14:20 on 23 November 2007
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Thanks for reading, Oonah. It's her her forehead a forehead
imperceptibly lined
with the problems of the day |
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Yes, Me too!
joanie
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 James Graham at 19:42 on 23 November 2007
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Such a vivid snapshot - body language that says a great deal, very easy to visualise from your description. One little thing - could the very last word, 'one', be dropped?
James.
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joanie at 23:07 on 23 November 2007
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Absolutely, James! It's done. Thank you very much.
joanie
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joanie at 23:29 on 23 November 2007
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Z and DBG....... many apologies; I thought I had said thank you for your responses. Much appreciated, as always!
joanie
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 J1mbo at 14:05 on 09 December 2007
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I like this. Is the title a reference to Macbeth - 'Tomorrow and tomorrow and tomorrow creeps on in this petty pace'? May be inaccurate, but this is what I thought of when I read the title and I thought really added to the poem.
I know the feeling. My thoughts are a bit lifeless at the thought of going back to work tomorrow. But this poem seems to go deeper than that, with the sense of a depression or that feeling of wanting to give up.
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joanie at 14:41 on 09 December 2007
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Hi J1mbo! Thanks for reading. Yes, it certainly is a reference to Shakespeare. Glad it worked for you!
joanie
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