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AVENGE ME

by azsacra 

Posted: 16 September 2007
Word Count: 138


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AVENGE ME



to implant
electrodes
in brain


the rat presses
the "button of
ecstasy"


the Orgy
without wish to
survive


the rite of
Unappeasable
Frenzy


to spread
Death on
testers!


to let out of
the cages rabid
dogs


to tear!
to tear!
to tear!


invisibility of
inner
mourning


disjointing of the tear
at endlessness
of little tears


to fall into
the sobbing of
the finest


to seek in fire
for straw
dogs


to protect
the senseless and
the finite


fluffiness of
chopped off
legs


this trembling in
the Midst of
the Sun


the shaking of
snouts of
little rats


the crack of
breaking
shell


continuous
transpiercing of
snowflakes


to interflow with
falling
drops


to wish
not to survive
too strongly


to wish!
not to survive!
too strongly!


to pull
the gun
trigger


......
avenge
me






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Beanie Baby at 15:12 on 13 December 2007  Report this post
Incredible! I LOVE this. It is epic despite its sparing use of words and probably one of the most powerful pieces I have ever ever read!

disjointing of the tear
at endlessness
of little tears


This stanza bothers me a wee bit - it doesn't flow as well as the rest - although that may well be intentional to tie in with the 'disjointing' factor.

Can't really knock the poem at all though. It has all the hallmarks of a competition winner and/or performance piece.

Fantastic read!
Beanie

Account Closed at 08:34 on 25 January 2008  Report this post
A wonderful performance piece - it would certainly be a cracker! Love the anger and the energy and the sheer pizzazz of it. You've have to read it out whilst spitting (almost!).

A
xxx


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