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Away
Posted: 19 August 2007
Word Count: 37
Summary: ..........Surely, on holiday, we should be able to write beautiful poetry!!! I failed.
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Experiences recent
permeate my mind yet
still
I can't write poetry.
Cloud-clad pine mountains
fill my memory
but
visions fail to translate
into words.
Perfection shown in
postcard beauty tries
to
stimulate my creative
juices.
Barren landscape.
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 V`yonne at 21:20 on 19 August 2007
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Now if you're are going for form, I would put
poetry
on a line of its own. I'd put
into
on to the previous line too.
I'm not sure about the last line. I lkie ti but...something...landscape/mind/postcard...needs to gel.
I'm telling all my friends. I'm the first person to get 3 pieces into Every Day Fiction e-zine. Were I young that woiuld be cool. At my time of life...THAT'S HOT.
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 Tina at 08:55 on 20 August 2007
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Joanie
Commiserations! I know the feeling - so often when you think you should you can't. My Granny always said - ought (as in ought to be able to) stands for nothing. But actually you have so well done!
Tina
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 joanie at 21:08 on 20 August 2007
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V'yonne and Tina - many thanks!
V'yonne - I love form, but this wasn't really following any pattern; rather than a worked-out scheme, this one was a gut reaction, I think.
Tina - I have had so much writing time these last two weeks, but I have written NOTHING!! How frustrating!
Thanks for reading and taking the time....
joanie
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V`yonne at 11:24 on 21 August 2007
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Hi Joanie, It just seemed to have a form arising within it. Not a anywhere in your viscinity, m'dear!!!
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Account Closed at 18:21 on 21 August 2007
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Ah well, you squeezed a "writer's block" piece out of the barrenness!
I know very well what you mean. I have so much time available for writing, but where's the muse?!
Steve
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joanie at 19:54 on 21 August 2007
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V'yonne - thanks for the support!
Steve, thanks for reading - it seems to be that the more time I have, the less I can write! Frustrating.
joanie
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 James Graham at 14:24 on 22 August 2007
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Just a brief comment as I'm getting ready to go away for a few days. The three main stanzas read like three new attempts to write a poem, and each time the poem says you've failed. Not that you have failed, but it's that curious paradox - a poem about not being able to write a poem. 'Cloud-clad pine mountains' and 'postcard beauty' have been done to death anyway, so it's a poem about not being able to write about a subject that's so well-trodden it's hard to find anything new to say. Back next week.
James.
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 Elsie at 17:12 on 22 August 2007
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Hi Joanie - It must be an August thing. I haven't been able to write either - well I have three half started kind of things. And when I went away earlier in the year I didn't write a thing either. September soon!
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joanie at 20:12 on 24 August 2007
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James and Elsie.. thanks for reading anyway!! James, you are always an inspiration! Many thanks.
joanie
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Ticonderoga at 14:48 on 26 August 2007
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It's amazing how a feeling of uncreativity can sometimes produce our best work.....I like this very much; though you may not have managed to make a picture of your holiday, you have given voice sparely and directly to something that should resonate very strongly with anyone who's ever attempted putting pen to paper.
Best,
Mike
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