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Tyre pressure
Posted: 22 July 2007
Word Count: 11
Summary: ....just 'watching' the Grand Prix.
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He's running on slicks
to defeat his arch rivals;
pedal-car racer
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 V`yonne at 16:09 on 22 July 2007
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Boys and their toys!? It always amazes me that they walk away from these crashes and go back for more the next day! I can't even watch!!
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 joanie at 16:37 on 22 July 2007
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I know! I don't watch, really. It was 'on' for the male members of the family!
joanie
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 Okkervil at 09:09 on 24 July 2007
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I went to a really picky writing group once where the haiku had to have a reference to the season (and a few other things, something about it being short), la la, and that's totally here in 'slicks', so well done you. Cute last line, very knowing semi-colon.
Bye!
James
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Account Closed at 17:34 on 27 July 2007
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Lovely! I'd change the semi-colon to a colon though, but I'm just that kind of a girl ...
Nice one!
A
xxx
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joanie at 18:11 on 27 July 2007
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Hi Holly. Usually, when you make a suggestion I can't press 'Owner Edit' quickly enough, but I'm not sure about this one. I think a colon or semi-colon shifts the meaning slightly. After a colon I would expect perhaps a list of things..... Oh dear, now I have been checking and think perhaps..... I'm not sure!!
Thanks so much! I'll have to think about it a bit more.
joanie
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Account Closed at 21:18 on 27 July 2007
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I'm just being 1950s, Joanie (it's my educational upbringing, you know!) - so feel free to ignore!
:))
A
xxx
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Beanie Baby at 08:16 on 31 July 2007
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Hi - back after a week in bracing Skeggi! Loved this - it is just so right! I wouldn't worry too much about those picky haiku people - though there is nothing wrong with being a traditionalist. Haiku - just like all other forms of writing - is evolving, and this little gem does nothing wrong!
Kind regards.
Beanie
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