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Hurting
Posted: 01 October 2003
Word Count: 38
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As I sever my flesh
and watch
the deep ruby slalom my shin,
I think of you,
my wayward love.
I see you in my head,
thrusting,
panting,
giving.
I slice again,
my breath catches
and I smile.
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 The Walrus at 10:59 on 01 October 2003
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Agony and ecstacy? Very poignant Bobo. But is the agony worth it?
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Bobo at 11:08 on 01 October 2003
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Nah...it was never worth it...HE was never worth it. My agony, his ecstasy...not a bundle o' laughs...
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Fearless at 11:12 on 01 October 2003
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Your poem reminded me, for reason unknown, of the piece 'Since there's no help', by Michael Drayton:
Since there's no help, come let us kiss and part.
Nay, I have done, you get no more of me.
And I am glad, yea glad with all my heart
That thus so cleanly I myself can free.
Shake hands forever, cancel all our vows,
And when we meet at any time again,
Be it not seen in either of our brows
That we one jot of former love retain.
Now at the last gasp of Love's latest breath,
When, his pulse failing, Passion speechless lies,
When Faith is kneeling by his bed of death,
And Innocence is closing up his eyes --
Now, if thou wouldst, when all have given him over,
From death to life thou mightst him yet recover.
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The Walrus at 11:17 on 01 October 2003
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Sounds dreadful... but from ashes the phoenix always rises...
And from expression, and if I may say, such eloquent expression such as yours, cathartic magic weaves its spell.
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Bobo at 11:22 on 01 October 2003
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Beautiful poem Fearless.
Thanks for your kind words Walrus...catharsis is very under-rated methinks! In hindsight, perhaps it would have been more cathartic to have taken the knife to my errant husband's flesh...!
BoBo
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The Walrus at 11:27 on 01 October 2003
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Hehehehe... it's still an option... revenge is both underated and also a dish best served cold. However, what's the point? Moving on and daring to live one's life in a state of beauty and harmony is the surely the best revenge non?
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Bobo at 11:33 on 01 October 2003
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I wrote a very short short story about exacting my revenge...if you get a moment and have the inclination take a gander at Hysterical Love... to be able to laugh at past trauma is a real blessing...
...to 'rise above' is in itself a fabulous lifter of the soul!
BoBo
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 riotous at 12:33 on 01 October 2003
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just read this! loved it. excellent. took a couple of reads to follow ruby slalom... but great very powerful. look forward to reading more! Jai
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Bobo at 12:58 on 01 October 2003
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Cheers Jai - one day I'll write something cheery...
B
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Bobo at 14:45 on 02 October 2003
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Dunno really - just feel like I should make the effort at some point to not sound like a miserable neurotic bitch!
;0)
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