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good neighbours

by cariad 

Posted: 01 June 2007
Word Count: 66
Summary: ...a continuation of "transformation"? don't think so
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once upon a time
there lived a caterpillar
underneath a leaf
having a quick CHOMP, CHEW
knowing he's a thief

his taste buds sprang anew

i lifted the leaf
to my disbelief he spoke!
this is a joke, i thought

"don't hurt me please!
i won't do damage
except to your cabbage"

so i picked the leaf carefully

AND THREW HIM INTO NEXT DOOR'S GARDEN!

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Simabuka at 13:39 on 01 June 2007  Report this post
Hi Poppy

Very good!! and yes I do that as well - throw things into next door's garden. In fact i caught a huge spider in the bedroom one night, and knowing it would come straight back if i simply threw it out, I posted it through next door's letter box.

Simabuka

Did you intend to send the jokes by e-mail or do i now have a horrible virus on my machine???
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Beanie Baby at 21:18 on 06 June 2007  Report this post
Very funny - had me laughing out loud!
Beanie
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Nell at 13:10 on 22 June 2007  Report this post
Hi cariad,

The damage/cabbage rhyme made me laugh, and I can imagine this colourfully illustrated in a children's book.

You might want to look again at

his taste buds sprang anew


which seeemed somewhat strained, both in meaning and in order to end-rhyme with 'chew'. I'm glad s/he lived to chew on though - maybe she flew back into your garden to lay her eggs...


Nell
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