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Posted: 15 May 2007
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I will go out tonight and beat somebody up
I will go out tonight and stamp on someoneís head
I will go out tonight and earn someoneís respect
I will go out tonight and leave somebody dead

I will walk the streets to see how much they fear
I will go with the boys to have a couple of beers
I will be jostled by someone whoíll wish they never
And I will smash my bottle and stick the jagged neck into whoever

I will prove my strength tonight to all the firm
I will not shake or tremble or hide because this time
I will show Iím not just making up the numbers
And I wonít ever again have to walk at the back of the line

I will comeback tonight and always be remembered
I will sleep tonight having demonstrated my worth
I will wake tomorrow morning as a man
And I will walk to school a leader of this turf








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portobelloprincess at 02:31 on 06 October 2007  Report this post
Very powerful writing - the second stanza 'jarred' slightly for me as the rhythum changed and did so again in the third. Its contemporary, disturbing and sounds like ' I am angry' sort of writing. I really like the way that you start with ' I will ' - over and over - it makes it memorable - especially as it rounds off with and ' and.....'



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