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Drop

by hailfabio 

Posted: 25 March 2007
Word Count: 16
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I love to feel you
dripping into me.

But why do you always
drip through me?






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Beanie Baby at 21:16 on 26 March 2007  Report this post
Hello Stephen, hope you are keeping well. This struck me as amusing and a bit tongue-in-cheek so I hope I have not misinterpreted it. To me it symbolises two of the many sides of a close relationship and your spare use of words is very well suited to the subject matter. This is why I so love short poetry - why say it in thirty stanza if you can say it in 16 words? Thank you very much for sharing.
Beanie.
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smudger at 09:14 on 30 March 2007  Report this post
Hi Stephen,

I like the wistful quality this has. For me it expresses anticipation, followed by the frustration of failing to connect with someone.

Nice work.

Tony
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Account Closed at 14:34 on 13 April 2007  Report this post
Wistful and wry, I loved it!

A
xxx
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hailfabio at 13:58 on 16 April 2007  Report this post
Glad this was enjoyed.

Thanks
Stephen
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