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What If

by LiverbirdLou 

Posted: 21 September 2003
Word Count: 104

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What if tomorrow never appears?
What if I start drowning in my tears?
Will my life ever be the same?
Will you tomorrow remember my name?
What if there is no more happiness meant for me?
What if I slowly fall into misery?
Will I still remain sane?
Can you ever take away this pain?
What if I die before I awake?
Will my soul stay or will the lord take?
What if there is no more meaning to live?
What if I have no more love to give?
Will I ever stop crying from the hurt?
Or will I end buried under dirt?

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Anna Reynolds at 11:23 on 28 September 2003  Report this post
Liverbird Lou, the dramatic tone of this appealed to me- and I wondered if it would work also if you freed yourself from the restriction of rhyming- 'will my soul stay or will the lord take' seems forced because you've having to fit words in a particular order, and the dark, melancholy sense of the poem feels like it could really take off if it had no limits on it. What do you think?

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