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churra

by o11ie 

Posted: 20 February 2007
Word Count: 106


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I like to kiss your eyes
When you squeeze them tight
Your face framed in the sunlight

I like to kiss your neck
When you lean your head to one side
You lips spread wide, a smile that could turn the tide

I like to kiss your cheeks
When the cold wind makes them red
Wishing we were laying together naked instead

I like to kiss your finger tips
When your hand rests on my chest
Our bodies flushed and cooling in our feathered nest

I like when you kiss my lips
As I wake up whilst you dress
Falling back to sleep with your scent






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mermaid at 14:11 on 21 February 2007  Report this post
Ollie,

I like the way you focus in on the simple little things, in this poem. It feels particularly intimate because of that. You haven't made any sweeping statements, and that's refreshing. And you've followed the 'show, don't tell' writing rule really effectively.

Mermaid


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