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Lemac

by Hooray99

Posted: 18 February 2007
Word Count: 66
Summary: I grew up in a desert and became quite fascinated by the humble camel.

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Snarl for me
Oh wonderful, warm furred beast
Bare your horsy teeth
and drool.
You are not camouflaged
amid the arid land;
You’re confident
arrogant:
kick out your many knees!
You know who’s boss.
Red, orange, brown tasselled glory
Matted but patted
Tipped and whipped;
ready to race
or a more leisurely pace.
Snarl for me
Oh wonderful, warm furred beast
Make the hot sand fly!

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mermaid at 14:21 on 20 February 2007 Report this post

Hi there Katherine,

I love this little poem - it's full of character and movement. I find the camel quite an odd creature, but you made me warm to it.

I particularly liked this bit:

ready to race
or a more leisurely pace.
Snarl for me
Oh wonderful, warm furred beast
Make the hot sand fly!

This line I wasn't so sure about. There was something a bit cliched/ordinary about the description in it, somehow, in my POV:

Red, orange, brown tasselled glory

I like the image of the tassels though.

Great stuff.

Mermaid