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Problems

by hailfabio 

Posted: 06 February 2007
Word Count: 13
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Everyone's got problems,
but my problems are more serious than yours.
So listen.






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Beanie Baby at 20:44 on 06 February 2007  Report this post
Good to have you back, Stephen. How are you keeping these days?

This little haiku touches a chord because we all think our problems are more serious than everyone else's.

I quite like your 'So listen' demand at the end and it goes to show just how passionately your narrator feels about his particular predicament - along side demonstrating how alienated and ostracised we can feel when our problems really get a grip on us (and speaking as a self-confessed depressive, I can really identify with that) - even when we aren't!

Considering this verse is just 13 words long, you have really dig deep and I am mightily impressed by the spare use of words.
Beanie
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Account Closed at 15:45 on 09 February 2007  Report this post
Perfect. Loved it. Really, really strong. More please!

A
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joanie at 20:17 on 09 February 2007  Report this post
Hi Stephen. This made me laugh aloud, because it rings so true! Very insightful, I thought.

joanie
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hailfabio at 21:21 on 11 February 2007  Report this post
Glad u liked this little peice, just thinking about how much moaning evering does. i've been away so good to be back.....

Thanks
Stephen
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V`yonne at 16:58 on 12 February 2007  Report this post
I couldn't agree more!

V'yonne.

(New to the group and enjoying all you fantastic poets. Think I'll give up now!)
Read the WriteWords interview with Oonah Joslin (V`yonne)
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Beanie Baby at 21:12 on 12 February 2007  Report this post
V'yonne - please don't leave us! We all had to start some time (I nearly gave up before I even posted my first piece!)and it really is worth sticking to it!
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