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Attainment - Level 1
Posted: 04 January 2007
Word Count: 51
Summary: This started as a reposnse to the exercise in Poetry Seminar but I think it has taken a different route!
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identify
individual
items
in
a
list
Imitate with approximate
pronunciation
and intonation
Respond to individual words
presented in context
Copy familiar words
correctly
identify
with me
I'm the list
of items
making a whole
I can imitate
approximate
intonate
I respond
whether in
or out
of context
My copying is
perfect
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 Elsie at 20:02 on 05 January 2007
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Joan, That was quick -
This has a very melancholy feel to it, a feeling of it being a struggle to put down the words in the right order. It feels like a plea for help, a certain desperation, and a robotic feel.
I think the first four stanzas are taken directly from a kind of test paper - then the following is you taking the idea and going with it - that's my guess. It makes me think of a doll, that can respond, 'intonate and imitate'. There's something quieting and thought provoking about it. The last line is saddest of all - such desperation.
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 joanie at 20:21 on 05 January 2007
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Thank you, Elsie. I'm glad it wasn't totally incomprehensible. The first four stanzas are (verbatim) from the National Curriculum Levels - Attainment Targets for Listening, Speaking, Reading, Writing - in Modern Foreign Languages.
I am fascinated by your response; I didn't set out to convey sadness or desperation, but you are absolutely right! Perceptive.
Thanks again!
Joan
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 Nell at 07:02 on 06 January 2007
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Hi Joan,
I'm trying to imagine the original document, wondering if the robotic feel has arisen due to the formatting - partly I think. It's definitely there though, particularly in the last four stanzas, which would have quite a different feel if lineated as prose.
I find it slightly worrying that the first four stanzas have been taken verbatim from the NCLs - they're so clinical/unfeeling. The last four stanzas feel to me less like desperation than a complete draining of the narrator, who, having to implement the instructions has herself become programmed/robotic. A clever device, as I know very well you haven't, but it works really well.
A great response - still working with mine - interesting exercise though - thanks Elsie.
Nell.
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joanie at 11:19 on 06 January 2007
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Thanks, Nell. Yes, there is definitely a feeling of losing one's individuality and becoming programmed to deliver in a certain way; robotic isn't so far from the reality.
I'm looking forward to yours!
Joan
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 DJC at 13:33 on 09 January 2007
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It does sound robotic, doesn't it! Funny how lineation can do something like this. shows you how important it is.
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joanie at 22:11 on 10 January 2007
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Thanks, Darren. Good to see you. Yes, it's amazing what a difference lineation makes. Fascinating stuff!
Joan
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