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An Accident
Posted: 15 September 2003
Word Count: 14
Summary: Haiku
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A cool fresh wind blows
Its careless breath breaks a tree
Nothing is perfect
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 peterxbrown at 00:58 on 16 September 2003
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What a great idea for a Haiku! All the style and solemnity of the genre rounded off with a brilliant almost throw away line. The humour is refreshing but the careless breath image remains very strong. Everything about this fabulous Haiku is well balanced.
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llydstp at 14:46 on 16 September 2003
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Thank you all for your generosity. By the way Maria, only the last word was 'perfect.' ;-)
Steve
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Fearless at 18:49 on 14 March 2004
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Steve
When I originally read this, I imagined one of the trees in the forest behind my house; but reading again, I was reminded of the bonsai tree I fussed over (with catastrophic results).
I liked the as-a-matter-of-fact humour and brevity of this. Thanks,
Woz
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llydstp at 21:11 on 14 March 2004
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Thanks Woz. I have also had catastrophic results with bonsai trees, but seem to have at last had success with a couple. If only I could do the same with a precious relationship which is going through a bad patch at the moment.
Take care,
Steve.
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llydstp at 10:37 on 15 March 2004
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Isn't it strange that two people have seen humour in this poem, although none was intended?
Woz, you are so lucky to have a forest behind your house.
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Fearless at 13:11 on 15 March 2004
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Perhaps Steve, it is because there are circumstances, but also responses. I'll be thinking of you while I go a'rambling in the woods today.
Woz
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